Tended

There stands, among the trees of my remembrance, a smothering indistinctness of chaos, in the forest of our youth,

where once we experienced innocence.

Wide-eyed and virginal, memories, like paths through the twisted brambles of my mind, follow hopes to a trail of dead ends.

Colder your season has become and the colors, of the Autumn of your life, falls to the earth and withers.

I would gather your leaves unto me, and have them bloom again, like Father Time's children playing in the fields of yesterday.

Were that I tended gardens of your soul instead of fishing words of thought for your mind.

That I could resist time and age and grow your beauty beyond the countenance of saints and angels with that craft.

Alas, only penned memories of thought and descriptive phrases, to capture a moment of your features.

Love has wings and lasts eternal beyond gardens and frames that seek to border your life.

And with your love I am free from all constraints.

Author's Note

Guild Wars 2 - Fear Not This Night, Piano Only by ArenaNet

Reviews

[Michael Stevens]

Really a fine poem; makes a person think, and believe me, if you can make me think of something more important that what the toy surprise is in my box of Captain Crunch, you've accomplished something!

[Kenneth The Poet]

And with your love I am free from all constraints.

Love that line.

[Sami Khalil]

"Love has wings and lasts eternal beyond gardens and frames"

True words. A very nice poem...:)..............

[Devesh]

You're almost musical.....the words have been selected with much caress, which is what love deserves, it deserves no less. This was lovely, Raymond, you transported me into that forest with your words, you're a master wordsmith! Thanks for sharing this! =)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is truly wonderful writing Ray .Ireally enjoyed it :)

[Nusquam Esse]

This is a great read, I love the imagery, and that sense of haunting nostalgia! Incredibly beautiful selection of words, and I like your music selection as well. As for improvements, you misspelled Autumn, and your sentence "like times children" feels really awkward, I think there is a word missing.

[Raymond Federle]

Thank you Nus..typo fixed and I re worded that line ..I think it might flow better now and is more clear in what I am trying to confer... Thank for the review and the suggestion! You are always a good spotter and helper! :)

[Nusquam Esse]

Looks much better! Didn't realize you intended it to be "Time's children"; that inclusion of an apostrophe and capitalization makes it much more clear.