Tended

There stands, among the trees of my remembrance, a smothering indistinctness of chaos, in the forest of our youth,

where once we experienced innocence.

Wide-eyed and virginal, memories, like paths through the twisted brambles of my mind, follow hopes to a trail of dead ends.

Colder your season has become and the colors, of the Autumn of your life, falls to the earth and withers.

I would gather your leaves unto me, and have them bloom again, like Father Time's children playing in the fields of yesterday.

Were that I tended gardens of your soul instead of fishing words of thought for your mind.

That I could resist time and age and grow your beauty beyond the countenance of saints and angels with that craft.

Alas, only penned memories of thought and descriptive phrases, to capture a moment of your features.

Love has wings and lasts eternal beyond gardens and frames that seek to border your life.

And with your love I am free from all constraints.

Author's Note

Guild Wars 2 - Fear Not This Night, Piano Only by ArenaNet

Reviews

[Madison O'Dwyer]

"There stands, among the trees of my remembrance,
a smothering indistinctness of chaos."
Those lines caught my heart right from the beginning and I was immersed in your poem.
"Alas, only penned memories of thought and descriptive phrases,
to capture a moment of your features." - These lines are breathtaking.
The entire poem is just one beautiful line after another. Thank you so much for sharing :)

[Pryde Foltz]

I would gather your leaves unto me, and have them bloom again, like Father Time's children playing in the fields of yesterday.

Were that I tended gardens of your soul instead of fishing words of thought for your mind.

Just splendid, Raymond. You rise up sentimentality with this very eloquent and original love write.

[MsJewel]

Of all your poetry I've read this hands down is my favorite. So many lines worth repeating, worth remembering....
Love has wings and lasts eternal beyond gardens and frames that seek to border your life. - stunning, stunning poetry my friend. Going into my library.

:) Julie

[Leigh]

You have connected and linked key aspects of a life and brought to mind with great understanding that what is cherished should cared for. A quite haunting and memorable piece.

[Jack...]

Raymond, this was exquisite. I felt this as if I were walking through that forest, hearing the rustling leaves and watching the branch woven skies above become bluer with each step. Loved this poem my friend.

[Brittany Zedalis]

"Love has wings and lasts eternal beyond gardens and frames that seek to border your life"
I really love that line. In fact, I really love this piece entirely. :]

[Baby Ricochet]

Dark and touching. Good one Raymond

[A. Amos]

This is one chiilout and cool piece bro, throughly enjoyed the read...

[Frieda P]

Achingly beautiful, this is my favorite of yours thus far, darkly hue'd reminiscing with a brilliant ending. Lovely Raymond.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is so dark and beautiful. I only have one tiny suggestion, and take it as you wish, I am not sure about the repetition of bloom again, there are so many things you could swap one of them out for ... but again, maybe you wanted it that way.

[Raymond Federle]

Ah yes...thanks for spotting that... it was a copy n paste error...I reworded a line here and there after I posted it.... thanks KL! :)