I know her from before.

Killing me inside, a little more each day.
Her youth and beauty seek to destroy the old,

diseased, rotting shell that I have become.
Without I am no more than just the sum of abandoned memories.

My younger self so long forgotten.
All I hold dear is a nail of light,

driven deep into the core of my sadness and dark.
It consumes me, till even the thought of my self slowly fades and perishes.

Reviews

[Micheal Abraham]

always enjoy reading your pieces you have done it once again..bravo

[Ruth]

Deeply emotive...
Strange how we involuntarily hold onto that which grants our demise to give us voluntary purpose...
Powerful piece x

[FlatLineBeauty]

Short yet so powerful! Loved it you did an amazing job Ray. xo Winter

[MsJewel]

You have shared some very powerful emotions in so few words. Really quite impressive. I admire the depth of your poetry. It feels "real".

:) Julie

[Raymond Federle]

Thank you all for your wonderful reviews! :)

[Judy]

I love this - the emotions are very powerful - you really get to the crux of the point - your word usage is powerful - I am particularly moved by your line breaks - which is why I was intrigued by the one that you started a second second sentence in the middle of the line.

[MichaelsLyric.com]

This sounds like you are talking about human aging and differences in attitude and view, because of of it. This piece expresses great sadness and a feeling of no turning back. Nicely written. Thank you for sharing.

[Diana]

This is real, painful and real. I really enjoyed the nail metaphor.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this poem. It is stark and moving. It may just be a personal preference thing, but would it be too bold to suggest breaking up the longer lines?