Jenga

A poem about current events in my life....Enjoy.

You stack bullshit up on me like a Jenja pile,

Hoping that I won't wiggle and fall.

Hoping that I can keep up and stay up for a while.

But in reality,I'm weak and wobbling but still stand tall and strong.

Inside,I am about to ball

I am really,really sick of it,

I have enough on my plate as it really is.

But you keep stacking on top of my tower.

Waiting for me to crumble,waiting for me to fall.

You say you are my father,but what kind of father would do this at all?

Let's rate her suffering from 1-10.

Not enough?

Let's stack more on her all over again!

This must be a game to you.

A game you like to play.

'Cause once I am weak enough,your bullshit doesn't go away.

It stays and stacks some more on my plate.

Daddy,What happened to you?

Reality to you must be really late?

Daddy,I am nearly 15,and  I have my surgery soon?

While pile up my plate,

We don't even have a surgery date.

Why do you want a divorce so soon?

Daddy,I know you need money,

and want to have a hot honey.

But what happened to you?

You are selling our house,

You creepy mouse.

You don't even live here.

What gives you a right to sell my house away?

Daddy,after surgery where will I stay?

Since you want so badly to take my house away.

Daddy,what happened to the man I thought that I had known?

When we went on vacation,

You went and got a loan.

You went to the real estate place,

Got a broker and a lady with a pretty face.

You asked them to appraise MY home.

You don't even live here!!

We're not even grown!

How dare you try to sell,my one and only home!

You betrayed us!

What happened to you?

You left us,and now your selling the only house I've lived in.

You are selling my home!

How dare you do this?

I should have known!

Daddy,you are a liar!

You backstabber!

What happened to you?

I don't even know you anymore!

You do not belong here!

You left us and shut the door!

You have no right!

You have no right!

You have no right to sell our home! 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem. Hard when a parent fall apart. Hard for old people to walk a straight line and be good. I understand the important of a home. Good to have a place to feel safe. Strong emotions and statements in the poem. I hope things for okay for you. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Soul Fire]

Thank you for the review :D

[Barbara Walker]

This is so raw with hurt and betrayal and disbelief. A slap in the face from the one you love and trusted. Very sad.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you, and this is current events.

[Ruby]

It is so powerful but it takes you stright to the heart I love it.
100/100

[C.A. Lucas]

so dreadful

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Raya, this is so depressing and I hate to know that this is really happening to you and your family. I would ask my daddy the same questions as you are in your poem. He shouldn't have done that to all of you. Especially if he didn't stay there, he shouldn't put ya'lls house for real estate to take care of. That's shallow and very wrong! But I do like how you compared yourself to a jenga. How he keeps stacking problems onto you and it continues to grow more and more. Eventually, you feel as if you're going to take a big fall. But you have to stay strong! Great write! :)

Ashley Rivers-- Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Soul Fire]

Thank you so much Ashley

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're very welcome :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

So sad :(
Heart goes out to you...

[Soul Fire]

Thank you

[Crazy Cat Man]

i understand your frustrations. an uncle from central america sold half of the property from the family farm. he really backstabbed the family and he used the money to keep his young gold-digging wife happy until the money ran out. once the money ran out she cheated on him with a doctor who can always have money coming in. its sucks becuz we lost that land and could have used it for rent to make good money but he thought with his other head than the one on his head. Great piece. i love this and i feel ur frustrations

[Soul Fire]

Thank you for your review and I'm sorry that that happened :(

[PatrickBairamian]

A very powerful piece. Although I would write something like "i'm sorry," I won't because your actions that have led you to write this poem make me believe that you don't need strength. You are busting with it! You have the mind and power to overcome this point in your life, and you've taken the first step to do so with the writing of this poem. I am very happy that you can rise above all the bullshit and express yourself truthfully

[Soul Fire]

Thank you :D So much

[DarknessPeering]

Great way to express your fury Raya.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you so much

[True Henry]

A powerful piece, if not the best I've read in quite some time. Hell, it almost matches up to my very own work in its resounding ;-P I take Abbey Road's reaction first-hand, but once I managed to close my jaw I was finally able to type this out.

Your metaphoric usage is brilliant, and I couldn't use any closer of a word, and I applaud the repetitious use of the word 'BULLSHIT', which drove like a nail each and every time I read it. The bitterness of your character towards her father is well-deserved, and I imagine this person almost facing this storm-front in their life with a metal rod hurtling insults at the gods themselves. You've created another of the Titans, Raya, and this one is sure to come out of it victorious.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you!! The reason my poems..(.especially this one )are so real and the characters are so lifelike is because this particular poem is about current events in my life right now...my parents have been separted for 3 years and my dad recently went behind my moms back (when mom,my bro&i were away) and had an appraisal done on OUR HOUSE!!!he doesn't even live with us....he wants to sell the only house I've ever lived in because his name is on the deed of the house and he will get half of the $$$ and he needs money to pay off HIS debt .... And he wants a divorce and he wants this all to happen before my operation.......