Anchor

A crazy thing I did for my boyfriend to prove to him how much I love him.( This was before we started dating.)I walked all the way to his house,He lives in a different town...

When I said I'd run to you.

I guess you didn't believe me,

But now you do.

There I was at the end of your street.

Waiting til, you'd come out, and we could finally meet.

I know you feel like a horrid guy.

But I assure you; you are believing a lie.

I don't know why,

But I want that lie to die.

Babe, I promise you that I will always stay,

even when you try to push me away.

I know that your afraid,

and that's okay.

But Anyway,

I stood there in the blazing sun,

Waiting for you.

So I could convince you that you are the ``one.''

You walked me back to your house,

We talked and cried in the living room,

Confessing our sins,

Releasing our gloom.

I hope you know that I still won't walk away,

even though you've really hurt me.

Baby,I love you too much to just leave.

I hope you know that.

So don't even grief.

I am not leaving you.

I will not leave.

I am staying here.

I might need a few Aleve's.

Aha!

But anyway

I'm going to stay,

To make sure you're okay.

You are not going to get rid of me that fast,

'Cause babe,I believe that we're meant to last.

Just forget about the past.

This is now,

That was then.

Babe I love you,

and that's the end of all your doubts.

The solution to all your pouts.

Just don't kick me out,

or I'll have to break right back in!

Aha!

I am not leaving you.

I will not leave.

I am staying here.

I love you,and I'm always near.

I'm anchored here.

Reviews

[Nicole]

this is really cute :) my favorite line is the last couplet :) my only comment would be to watch your meter. i like the couplet style that it's written in, but adding a few more syllables to the lines might help the flow along some. really good writing though, keep going!

[B30]

So well-written, so much in depth and... just words can't describe.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you so much (: Glad you liked it!

[Ruby]

That's so sweet I love it :) 100/100

[Soul Fire]

thank you very much

[Ruby]

your welcome :)

[C.A. Lucas]

pretty, very pretty

[Soul Fire]

thank you very much

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and I like the ending.
"I am not leaving you.
I will not leave.
I am staying here.'
Good to be anchored in in the emotion of love. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Soul Fire]

Thank you for the excellent review

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love tha anchor analogy, and that walk..crazy maybe but adorable definitely...

Love shown here, says it is true and pure...brilliant write :)

[Soul Fire]

Thank you

[Zachary_James]

I can really relate to this, in so many ways i thought it was great.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you

[BasketballGirl13]

I liked how you wrote this story as a poem. I think it is a cute idea. Great job!

[Soul Fire]

Thank you

[Steven Cash]

We all do crazy things for love

[Soul Fire]

Thank you

[True Henry]

Very well done miss. I will not say beyond what is the necessary 100% rating. While I my general knowledge of poetry is elementary, I feel you have mastered the use of free verse. Also, your characters' unconditional acceptance of one another is touching, and I must commend your continual reference to running, and the false self-identities one assumes after being told something for so long. I feel you have touched with the heart of humanity on this one.

My appraises.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you