Prologue

Prologue

 

                Pieces. Like a puzzle we all have pieces; pieces of our past, of our present. Pieces we haven’t even discovered yet. My pieces got scattered somewhere in the dessert of Arizona. They fell away from me like a dried flower, shattering in the wind. This snapshot of me, in this moment, is not only how I lost those pieces, but how I found new ones. I found new pieces in a man. It’s ridiculous, almost childlike to believe that a single person can save you, but for me he did. There have been laughter and tears on this road, and there are times I find it hard to believe I’ve come as far as I have. If there’s one thing I’ve learned over the years it’s that things never go as you plan, the pieces never fall like you want them to, but all things happen for a reason.

 

I can’t begin to explain the amount of love I feel for Arizona. From the desolate dessert to the bustling city of Phoenix it’s all I have ever known, it’s all I’ve ever wanted to. I’ve had no desire to explore outside my home, all I needed and wanted was right here. I grew up in the heart of phoenix, no siblings but two loving parents. Those loving parents of mine passed away in the late fall four years ago. A drunk driver in a big rig slammed their small Toyota going about sixty, and there’s just no coming back from a hit like that. Now twenty-two, working in a parts shop, I have no idea where my life is going or what I want to do. What I do know is that I’ll miss this heat. The way the sun bounces off my pale skin and shows off the highlights in my dark brown hair, but the time has come for me to leave. I’ll take my wrangler as Far West as she’ll carry me. Two duffel bags of clothes, and my faithful dog Chip in the backseat. I am hitting the road and never looking back; not because I want to, but because I have to.

 

Author's Note

A work in progress as always! Trying to get back into writing! I appreciate all feedback! hope you enjoy!

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Ok, so even though I want to know what has happened to this woman beforehand, you did kind of tease us a little with her parents car crash and I guess the rest is yet to come.
I have to say that your writing skills are really good, you didn;t waste any long words with sometimes have people reaching for their dictionaries to see what they mean. Your sentences were structured nicely - not too long or shortm they were just right. Then end part of this story told me that this girl is going on a big adventrue (wih few clothes and chip) I liked the way in which it ended and I do hope to see chapter 1 soon. As this adventure I feel, will be one which will hld my interest.

Mark.

[Aaron Williams]

Thanks for the feedback! The main character is actually a guy, his name is Elliot. I am currently working on the first chapter! It will be out soon! Thank you again! :)

[Van Graham]

I enjoyed this, but the chronology of it and just figuring out what is currently happening vs. what has happened (and when) is hard to figure out, and the focus feels a little scattershot. I think that if this effect is intentional (most likely), you should work to make it either more specific about one event or less specific about all events, or maybe just make it longer and spend more time defining the situation. Instead of teasing the audience and creating intrigue, it kind of just feels confusing. But still, I like what I read and I think that this could become something very interesting.

[Aaron Williams]

Thank you for this feedback! I agree that I should define what is happening a little more. I was trying to pull people in by making it somewhat unknown, but I will definitely focus the prologue a little more! Thank you again!