Haze

 

 

Suns rays beating, shifting

Through clouds soft surfaces in a haze

No hiding, no shade beneath shadows

As light fades overcast skies

Dews, mists, a cataclysmic pattern

Swirling, ominous, overlapping grays

Swallowed here in sorrows blanket

No anguish in me, to be

Just to be to just let it be

Trees moan and prey freezes

Predators sleep and the world bleeds

 

Expressionless

 

Souls swarm, sounds like buzzards screeching

The bell rings, mid winter takes toll upon natures weak

Watching, exhaling slowly,

Sighing to keep from weeping, trying

To keep everything in reason and in rule

Be just to be and just let it be

Beauty in the hand of colorless duty, come

Manifest, survive as you might,

The still of night will come once again, a gifted breath

With a promised end my friend,

My friend there is a beauty to death  

 

Renewed

 

To return again

 

To be just to be to just let it be 

 

Reviews

[FatalityWriter467]

I hope this poem gets lost in the clouds. F-

[Water_the_Sun]

I love this:D

Very dark and solemn, but not morbid. It is an honest and a colourful(inspite of your mentioning "colourless" and "grey" to set the dark mood) depiction of life.

The imagery is beautiful and the words you used, adn the way you used them, speak volumes to even the most shallow of readers(shallow as in, those who dont over-analyze like some of us tend to do:s*nervous laugh*)

[Lau]

Great work! Very well written, and I really loved the last part:

"Beauty in the hand of colorless duty come manifest. Survive as you might, the still of night will come once again. A gifted breath with a promised end. My friend, my friend there is a beauty to death. Renewed to returned again, to be just to be to just let it be."

I agree with Tiffany and Jen; great imagery.
Keep up the good work!

[Jen Marks]

"To be just to be to just let it be."
How did you come up with that line? :)
I agree with Tiffany; great imagery.
Your writing is very mature.
I hope I get to that level very soon! :P
Very, very, very well written!!
Keep on writing.


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[Tiffany]

Incredibly vivid! Thanks for sharing, t.