More than a Tropical Paradise

This poem is about my latest missions trip down to Rio Grande, TX. The camp there was beautiful and we got to experience many things, and this poem is my tribute to one of the most amazing work weeks!

A tropical paradise might be all that one sees

But I witnessed much more- God’s promises to me

 

I saw the rain, the fruit, the birds

But I saw much more- I heard God’s words

 

I felt the sun rays, the sand,  the wind

But I felt much more- I could finally feel God’s presence again

 

I sensed the joy, the dedication, the love

But most importantly- I could sense God from above

Reviews

[justdandy]

I like the repetition that kind went along after the the dash.
Also somethings that I thought that would make your writing better:
"I saw the rain, the fruit, and the birds;
I felt the sun rays, the sand, and the wind;
I sensed the joy, the dedication, and the love" - maybe just eliminate the and. It would make the poem more poetic.

[StayAnchored]

Thanks for the review!
And you're right, that does sound better! THanks again :)

[justdandy]

Yeah, no prob.

[Davidgeo]

I would've substituted "God" and "God's" with "world" and/or "nature/'s" cause I'm an atheist or something close to that. But anyway, I know good writing when I see it... this is good writing. And so I shall say it is good... meow? Yes. Meow.

[StayAnchored]

Haha, well thank you! I'm glad that people of different backgrounds can enjoy my writing! :)

[Davidgeo]

Meow? Yes, meow.

[beautiful dreamer]

i like the rhyme scheme and i LOVE the message. i went on a small local mission trip this spring break with my campus church and i felt this exact way. wonderful piece!

[StayAnchored]

Aren't mission trips the best?!? They bring out the best in you, force you out of your comfort zone and closer to Christ! Thank you again! :D

[Jeremy Hiles]

Wow! This is a great poem! It captures that sense of awe and wonder of how powerful God is, and I love how it illustrates how He connects with us on a personal level! Great job!

[StayAnchored]

Thank you!! You taking the time to read this made my day a little brighter! :)

[Jeremy Hiles]

You are very welcome! Glad to help bring some cheer! :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

^^ Very well done! I enjoyed reading this poem. God knows how to reach each of us.

[StayAnchored]

Thanks, friend! :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome! ^^