My Heart's Not Yours

This is a letter/poem to my future spouse! :3

I fantasize of how we'll meet...

The day you'll sweep me off my feet

I wonder if I've known you for years

And if you'll help me through my tears

  I long to love you all my days

And I'll pray God uses you in amazing ways

I'm sorry, dear but my heart's

not yours Because I gave it wholly to the Lord

Reviews

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

hmm I like the idea of this, but I think you used the lines to often, it takes away from the rhythm, in my opinion anyway. I think if you start out with "I fantasize of how we'll meet...the day you'll sweep me off my feet" and not use the lines "I'm sorry dear," until the very end, but it's alright the way you have it, it's just an idea to think about ^^

Good Job

[StayAnchored]

Thanks! I'll definitely go back and consider that! :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome ^^

[beautiful dreamer]

i like this but i dont. sudden twist endings like this are my least favorite but i love the message! good job very intriguing and beautiful penned.

[StayAnchored]

Thanks! :3

[beautiful dreamer]

youre welcome!

[Gee]

For me(IMHO) if the whole poem had been written with the Lord solely as the subject of your hearts desire it would have worked better.Saying that enjoyed your poem.

[StayAnchored]

Thanks! :)

[Gee]

You're welcome

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I love this poem. The words stand out to me a lot!
I think it has great potential!
Great poem you have here.
(Please read my story called The Blonde Girl I think you would like it a lot.)
keep up the great work!

C. Lee Battaglia

[StayAnchored]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the review!! :)

[Kieta!]

I wrote a letter to my future husband as well, although it was not as beautiful and poetic as yours! I'm sure yours will love this when he reads it! Great job!

[StayAnchored]

Awe, thanks!! Your future husband will love yours too! :)

[MomzillaNC]

I agree with Peace Keeper's review and advice. I also believe, having given my heart "wholly to the Lord," that He made space for my heart to love all the world, and to share that space with my soulmate.

[StayAnchored]

I appreciate you taking the time to review this poem! :)

[MomzillaNC]

I hope it was helpful.