A Baby's Cry

She never took a breath.

She never sang a song.

She never told a story.

She never saw your glory.

She never prayed.

She never cried.

She was a baby who discretely died.

You took her up to live with You.

She was loved more than words could say.

She will meet her family up with You one day.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

How is this one?? I changed the ending slightly... I know it still isn't done but I think it's better

Reviews

[marie]

it doesnt seem quite finished, try adding at least two more stanzas good job with the title but you really must add more to this

[Sir Jaykom]

Enjoyed reading it. Just felt like u needed a much stronger ending. Also I think a title will put things in a much better prospective.

[StayAnchored]

Thanks

I'm trying to come up with a title. :P

[StayAnchored]

Haha! Ya'll are so right! I forgot to put the rest! I am giving up using my ipod for this. :)

[luviva]

am lost... only if u added a few more stanzas.. but all in all its got an edge on it

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

hmm I do believe that you have left out some words at the end