Unity

We have scars on hands
and in our words

snicked quickly to not be able to cry
it’s elevated not to hurt us

we are going to display
against them and opened eyes
in wchich there is no bloody sacrifice 
although they have to accept it

you’vr shouting -
so I stoppel
we are not that kind of people 
that we have to run away

Our “together”
Is any redemption 
but it has waited unitl dawn
And silence

Translated by 
Anna Jakubczak Vel RattyAdalan

Author's Note

It's my new translation of poem by Polish poet Annie Chalasz - I have her agreement on publishing.

Reviews

[Chris]

What is the work's name... the English as used is causing me trouble in my understanding. The Polish Title?

[RattyAdalan]

The original title in Polish is "Wspólnota" other synonyms in English is "Community". Maybe I wrong translate the title, if yes, I apologize for my mistakes. I still learn English and translating is my hobby.

[Chris]

Don't apologize for sharing something that has meaning for you.... Hell, even native English speakers have issues with how to say what they want said. You've a fair grasp of the wording - and we ALL have to work on the shades of meanings.

[RattyAdalan]

Yes, it's true. But working on our abilities is the most beautiful way. Of course it's normal that sometimes we can to stumble across obstacles but always is a some kind of experience which teach us to something new. I like challenges and I want still develop myself. And I am glad that I can be with you on this page I know I will learn thanks for you not only new words in English but new type of writer poem in this language.

[Chris]

There are so many possible shades of meaning to be expressed in English for that one word - Wspólnota. Community, union, bond, ties, and other words... and the sense of how something interconnects people and the possible depth of that connection.

[RattyAdalan]

I think I will change the translation of this tittle. On word which will be closer to the meaning. I have to think it. Thank you for your opinion and advices.

[Len Gesinski]

Excellent write. Much in the way of tension.