Skin On Skin

Two lovers drowning in their hearts.

We are on the same bed

Under the same roof

Loving the hell out of each other

And we got nothing to prove

Your fingers are moving on my chest

Making sure my heart still beats for you

Girl, you're my whole world

After it was dark, it turned to be blue

69 shots of whiskey

And I can't remember anything

Is it lust or love, I can't tell

Is it heaven on earth or we're burning in hell

We're talking and looking at the sky above

But not everything you say is true

And not everything I do for you

Is under the name of love

-Rassoul

Author's Note

I would really like to hear your opinion about this.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

To my feeble memory, it seems other poems of yours that I've read have been more simply-stated & showing typical love sentiments (a little boring). This, in contrast, is nicely complex & unexpected. There's a harshness in your direct way of stating things that bumps up against the loving sentiments that might be buried within, & I prefer when a love poem is complicated like real life always is. This feels like there's a backload of passion/confusion/indecision/longing behind your words (nicely done!) Fondly, Margie

[angelina neves]

it has got pace and flows like a dance...
"Is it lust or love, I can't tell
Is it heaven on earth or we're burning in hell"

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked these words. They dance and move like a song. I liked the energy of the words. You made the reader feel each sentence. Thank you Rassoul for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dave]

This is very powerful! What you say is of pure sex. Love is an afterthought.. Making love is the catalyst that provides the exquisite pleasure.
This is very nicely done.

Take care - Dave

[Wajiha Nayeem]

omg....this is woah..... wonderful.

[Dandre1]

I really like this! It's very different and interesting how you explained he relationship. Very well done!

[Quinn]

Nice, really smooth flow for poetry, very vivid as well. Good write

[pia]

great work. a really smooth flow of words and a sensual feel to it
loved it !!

[Rassoul]

Thanks a lot, Pia.

[Joey Nizz]

This is some solid work, I liked the rawness of the words you wrote, and the way you twisted the words around to bring out their true colors.

Well done Rassoul, thanks for sharing.

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, Joey.

Waiting for more work of yours, too.

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome and thanks :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Intense and sensual poem. Honest-two people in a sexual relationship without strings. Heaven or hell- hard to tell. The protagonist questions himself. Great form, rhythm and flow. Deep and well- penned my friend.

[Rassoul]

I don't know what to say, really.

Thank you so much!

[k.s.]

I really love this and how accurate and honest it is. Thanks for sharing.

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, appreciate your words.