Yes, I am that stranger.

if you're reading this, it's too late.

I hope you remember me, I'm the stranger who made you smile day by day, the one who never got tired of making you happy.

I'm the stranger who took care of you and made sure you're fine everyday, the one who used to call you every night to hear your voice.

I'm the stranger who loved you more than anything, the one who never forgot about our anniversary.

I never wanted you to leave, In fact I did every possible thing to make you stay. We had a connection, a bond, like you're metal and I'm a damn magnet.

I'm the stranger who used to mean the world to you, the one who loved your naked soul before your naked body. 

Heartbreak, such a staggering end. You didn't break my heart, you ripped it into a million pieces; watched me bleeding and did nothing about it. You saw my soul evaporating infront of you and it didn't make you sad.

It was the end of us.

I am that stranger who's still writing about you, a message that you will never recieve.

-Rassoul 

Author's Note

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[JPDonelan]

That was pretty good. The piece does well to build up a sense of unhappy departure, and a continued longing on the part of the narrator.

That said, the piece also reminded me of why I tend toward writing somewhat dark pieces. Not very far in to the reading, I realized that much of these could also be played off from the perspective of a stalker, or someone overly infatuated with another (which may still be true). Certain lines, of course, did well to put distance between the two possible perspectives (the one you used and the one I denoted here).

Due the piece's more poetic, monologue-like styling I don't have much to provide in terms of constructive feedback. Anything that I could come up with has already been addressed by others.

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, review appreciated.

[JayG]

Not a bad poem. Well expressed, with good use of the language (though I'd suggest replacing "made sure you're fine everyday" with "Saw to your needs," since someone being "fine" is too general.

My only other comment is that the word, "Stranger" doesn't track, because it's obvious that this person wasn't, and isn't. In fact, you could replace it with "one."

[Rassoul]

Actually "Stranger" is the best word for this writing, it shows how much things turned to be bad after awhile between them.

[Sapientiam]

Unfortunately, I've never had romantic feelings for anyone, so I can't really relate. Though, I loved this because it shows just how fragile love is, despite the difficulties of building it. I actually envy you because you seem to write a lot about heartbreak, which means the love you experienced prior must have been really special... Not many people obtain that opportunity... Anyways, great job!

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, Sap!

[Brian]

Amazing story Rassoul

Heartbreak, such a staggering end. You didn't break my heart, you ripped it into a million pieces; watched me bleeding and did nothing about it. You saw my soul evaporating infront of you and it didn't make you sad.

Amazing WORDS! I really love how you describe feelings, nice job

[Rassoul]

Thanks a lot, Brian! Appreciated.

[Olafur]

such an amazing story Rassoul, keep writing more

[Rowling]

why do i've a feeling that your writings complete each other? nice work

[Rassoul]

Yeah I guess so, thanks Rowling.

[blue sky]

This is so good and powerful! really had fun rassoul

[Rassoul]

Thank you a lot, sky!

[Dave]

I can feel this so well. To have the love you thought was there to be turned not just away but out of you piece by piece.

Very strong, powerful writing. Thank you.

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, Mr Dave!

[Island Hippy]

Aloha rassoul, very strong writing and theme. I think you captured the emotion of once being so close to someone and then the pain of now being a stranger. Well done. Izzy

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, Izzy!

[Sofia]

Its so emotional...and touching... great work.. you've portrayed the pain and emotions very well in this poem...😊 I liked itt..

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you loved it!

[Sofia]

My pleasure!!

[Joey Nizz]

I can really relate to this, wow it reminded me of some certain writings I have wrote before..
Reading this got me goosebumps with every line I ended reading.

Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Rassoul]

Thank you so much for your words, Joey! Glad you had fun.

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)