I'm writing you this letter not because I missed you, but to remind you how much I'm suffering because of you, to remind you how painful it was to ditch me while I needed you the most.
To apologize, for loving you this much and you didn't deserve it.
I gave you my all and then what? you gave me nothing.
The problem is not that you're gone; your memories are still here and they're never fading away.
My life is full of agony right now and you're searching for a new person to love.
I'm writing you this letter and I'm full of tears.
I really feel for you. It sees to sting the most when we are "hopelessly in love" and find that the one we love could care less. I can almost feel the broken pieces of your heart.
its definitely from your heart , from your personal experience , there's no complain about grammatical mistakes in this piece , its pure connection with the writing and its very well done . cheers.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I really appreciate your words, thanks a lot for supporting me!
First Egyptian person I see around here.
Thanks a lot for your words, Nourhan!
7 Years Ago
Yeah i feel so lonely 😂😂😂 by the way _ if you didn't notice _ i am noon blue but i finally .. read moreYeah i feel so lonely 😂😂😂 by the way _ if you didn't notice _ i am noon blue but i finally decided to use my real name
This piece of writing tells the story of unrequited love that many have experienced & this is the way it can feel sometimes. This is my own preference, but I don't agree with blaming another person & accusing them of giving nothing, etc. We all go into relationships making our own independent choices. It's always a two-way street. The narrator of this seems like a person who can only see things one way, his way. I think this message is very true-to-life for some people, but I also feel this could be a more balanced picture of how a relationship ends, instead of just "poor me" . . .
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for your review, I really appreciate it!
It's written well for the most part. You're missing a few commas, and you begin a sentence without a capital letter. It's hard to say if those grammatical mistakes were done on purpose because the story is very prose-y. Almost poetic.
It sounds to me that POV does miss this lost love, but for whatever reason is denying it so they can heal.
I like how the exact reason of the separation is unknown, which leaves something to the imagination.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I really appreciate your review but I'm sorry but it's not even even close to be poetic.
Than.. read moreI really appreciate your review but I'm sorry but it's not even even close to be poetic.
Thanks alot for your words and sure I'll take your notes, hope you enjoyed!