I'm not prepared for whatsoever going to happen next, it's like we've chosen a road and we don't know where it leads, heaven or hell, we're the ones who have to choose. Do you treat your friends like you treat me? The answer is no. Friends don't treat each other like this, friends don't look at each other like this, friends don't get jealous about each other like this, friends don't fight in this way, friends don't text each other like this, friends don't talk about having babies from each other. Sometimes I don't know how to treat you, like should I get mad? Should i be jealous? and if I talked about anything, I will be talking as what? This is too much for me to handle.
What are we? One day I feel like you're mine and the other day you're a totally stranger. Why did we choose this? Are we in love? or we're just trying to fill the void in our hearts?
It feels weird, it feels weird that you're somehow the best and the worst thing ever happened to me. It's like a beautiful disaster; a miracle that'll never happen.
But if we're not friends then what are we? how can we define the relationship between us?
There are some people, some fiends, and the memories they give are both annoying and beautiful, and that's what makes them special to us...And eventually they evolve into he bittersweet people, who ate/is more special to us than anyone else we've. Ever known so far...By the sad part is we are so deep into such relationship that it's hard to figure out whether it's a just a friendly thing or something forever.Interesting, this confusion, this depth, and this affection is what makes things special, and we should let it flow naturally:) Nature has its own ways to make us perceive, and do what is right...Till then enjoy the complexity and dive in the affection, because nothing lasts forever!
The best part about your message is how authentic the questioning sounds. We all feel these pressing questions from time to time thru-out all our friendships. I don't believe asking such things out loud to the actual friend can be productive. But sometimes we just need to pour it out the way it comes out. This is a strong piece, as far as capturing a person's searching for answers, etc. If this were to be more of a storyline, then it could be strengthened by giving us more imagery so we can see, feel, touch, hear, smell, taste some of the specific details of such a friendship. For example, instead of saying: "friends don't talk like this" . . . you could actually give us an example of what "like this" is like. For me, one of the challenges of writing is to SHOW instead of telling. Picking one scenario to describe where a reader is left with the same questions: WHO WOULD DO THAT? But the written message doesn't need to actually express this incredulous feeling becuz I try to pick a real-life example to elicit this from the reader's own varied experiences. Just some ideas . . .
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thanks so much for your review I really appreciate it. I will contact you some time to have a conver.. read moreThanks so much for your review I really appreciate it. I will contact you some time to have a conversation about this and maybe to learn from you a little bit. Thanks again.
7 Years Ago
Feel free to message anytime. I only go online for a couple hours a day, so I may get back to you af.. read moreFeel free to message anytime. I only go online for a couple hours a day, so I may get back to you after a day or so *smile*
Please continue and fill this out. Love, it's true can be the most beautiful or agonizing thing one could experience. It seems you want or need clarification of exactly what the one you are in love with feels.
I'd say they're star crossed. I loved the piece. The abundance of commas fit it, giving it a certain feel of urgency, or panic. I can feel the narratives uncertainty and confusion, and it's both heart breaking and wonderful. Def a 100/100
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Oh god, thanks alot for spending your time reading this and for your sweet words.