Feel It

I got to tell you- I am pure, you are pure, everyone around us is pure. Its just that we got to feel it-The Pureness-The Most Beautiful Feeling!

Feel It

Feel It

In the deepest of Tranquility

Oh! Listen! The River Flowing

Singing The Purest Melody Ever

Warming Up The Heart

In The Chillest Era

Soul Burning With Love

Igniting Every Inch Of Me

Lighted By The Roars Of My Heart

Restless To Make Me Hear The Truths

In The Purest Of My Thoughts

Dissolved In The Purity

The Sky Swoons To Kiss Me

And I Give In To The Purest Motherly Arms

The Pureness Running In Every Inch Of My Blood

To Rush Out

And Be Absorbed By The Pureness

By Me

Feel It....

Who Am I? Who Are You? Why Are We Here?

The Only Answer I would Be Able To Give is I am pure, you are pure, we are here to be pure! Pure- such a simple four letter word, but it holds so much meaning! It's just that unless we feel it, we can't turn pure, but we would still remain pure! To Feel It, You Need To Remove All The Hatred and Ego from you and fill it with love. When you love and your love is pure, you get refined, you turn pure! So Just Love Everyone, Everything, Every Time In The World! 

Born Pure To Be Pure

Love Pure To Be Pure

Be You To Be Pure...

Author's Note

This is the first poem I am publishing here! Hope you people liked it. Please give your valuable feedback. Appreciation and Criticisms are welcome.

Reviews

[Bear]

I can see why people would be apprehensiveness about commenting on this poem, it has a unique sentence structure and it shows a person of great understanding as its creator. I feel the need to go back to my teaching days and ask you a few questions, first question; If tranquility is a sense of calm and peacefulness does it have a center? That said I point out your first sentence and as the reader I need more information about this place, I think I know what you are talking about but more info such as it is on a metaphysical plain would help me the reader understand your meaning.
This line (And I Give In Myself To The Purest Motherly Arms) you hove one word to many, the trick is to pick the right word take out, either the word IN or MYSELF. A person can either GIVE IN TO or GIVE MYSELF TO so which should it be? Well you have personalized this poem with the usage of the words me and my often so you should go with (And I Give Myself To The Purest Motherly Arms) :~) The only other thing I can tell you is to be careful of over using a word in a poem, use it to many times and it can become monotonous and that turns a read off faster than anything. I hope this was helpful, you already write poetry very well and if will only get better, I cant wait to see what your poetry is like when your 15 :~)

[Rainslover]

Thank you for such a good reply!
I wanted someone so badly to reply on it so that I can know how is it and where I have gone wrong.
Well, let me first tell this poem for me doesn't matter if it sounds good or bad as a poem. It is written as a message I have wanted to convey to the world from long.
This was the basically the idea:
Feel it,
The burning fire of your soul,
Igniting every inch f you,
Lighted by the roars of your heart,
Restless to make you hear the truths,
Transforming into the thoughts of your mind,
Dissolving into pureness,
The blood of pureness rushing,
To be absorbed by you,
Feel it!

This is the raw sketch. What I have put there as you said needs greater understanding and that's
what I want people to do, to not just read it, but try to go into the depths of the poem as much as they can, them to discover it and that is because I believe if a person can understand this poem I feel they have discovered themselves and finally understand who they are. I myself need to understand this still in more depths. It requires great understanding and I want people to gain it. Having said that reading this poem alone or a try for it isn't enough, you need to live it and the reason I changed the rawness is when you discover the rawness of this poem I need even you to discover the real 'YOU'. I am happy you could try it and live it and go to depths of it.

Coming to the technical parts,
Tranquility here can be anywhere, anywhere in the world there is silence. In the nature, in a room and even in a noisy room if you close your eyes and relax you find it. If going by rooms, I prefer a darker room. When its dark, you should close your eyes and try to find light. Think you are dead. Forget everything. Slowly you see a new, pure you emerging. Then you can imagine all the melody songs, all of the nature I have been speaking of along with the rawness. You feel the pureness now and then when you look into the depth of your hearts you can see the 'TRUTH'- THE ULTIMATE! You realize who you are?

This is what I mean. Thanks a lot. I'll also be careful about the words next time and correct the mistake. That's my pleasure.

Really thanks for taking an insight here and trying to understand this! :)

[Bear]

All that is fine but if you have to explain to your readers just what you meant then you have missed the point of what being a writer is about. Every writer I have even known (including myself) has wanted to show the world something we were sure it couldn't see or understand. I hope you are able to accomplish it, I and all the other writer I was talking about found we were just rethinking ideas that already existed. Good luck and good writing.

[Rainslover]

I'll keep this in my mind next time I write. Thanks for reviewing this. :)

[Emily]

I really like this one!
Well done!!

[Rainslover]

Thank You! Glad you liked it!