Moon

I would like your honest opinion on my poetry work as I'm planning to publish them on a large scale and would want to know if it's good to go

How Beautiful does the sun look
While it sets
Like your beauty while you mourn at the funeral of your feelings
Letting the moon appear by giving chance,
Yet it's invisible
Like you letting your heart to feel
Yet being covered,
Living for hours, and dying for days
Like the moon
You let yourself feel the warmth just for hours and be it cold for days.
How hard is it for them(sun and moon) to meet, once in six months, when the universe know their meet
Just like your heart n feelings meet,
When the clan know their meet.

Author's Note

I would like your honest opinion on my poetry work as I'm planning to publish them on a large scale and would want to know if it's good to go

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. Using capital letter to indicate ending is okay but you need the comma still to show the reader, the sentence is still flowing. Few can write with skill without using the periods and the comma. The poem was written well, you allowed the reader to feel and see your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Just Kim]

Living for hours, and dying for days

I like this line, it's so truthful, nicely said