A Song Of You

A Poem/Song

I never stopped loving you

in the dawn of endless night

stars shine on memory way

then magic comes to life.

There you stand in glory

a light for me to keep! 

to cross a restless sleeping world

and wake within the deep.

Morning call turns longing quest

into a gentle breeze

thoughts my love,of you- you- you...

enchants the air I breathe 

my weakness keeps me stronger

a power in my control

no holding back

a given task...

beyond this open door 

Loving hearts 

yearning touch

in time of new transition

holds a promise heart in hand

Arousing love's admission

Wait for me behind the veil

of lonely masquerade 

upon devoted open arms of

music sweetest serenade

Taste the strength in every tune

and bathe beneath my moon 

past the vein of tears that fall

in every song of you

loving hearts 

yearning touch

in time of new transition

holds a promise heart in hand

Arousing love's admission

Repeat Chours 

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I can feel the love in this one. Really well put. and the chorus is killer ("arousing loves admission" needs an apostrophe in "loves", and you don't really need to put "chorus" to the song - unless you underline it and put it in italics - but it on the whole is unnecessary, even if it is a song).

Overall, this is great. Well done! Much enjoyed.

[Rapturecapture]

Thank you for the kind feedback very much appreciated.

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is very beautiful, with a gentle unforced rhyme that is delightful. Unrequited love that is soft and romantic without being bleak and melancholy.

[Chris]

This poem/song of yours has held me here while my own thoughts swirled and became another life entry in my journal. Good morning - it went very well with coffee.

[Rapturecapture]

It's an acquired taste for sure! the aroma is powerful!
Rapture!

[Chris]

Eyes have a way of holding another's attention and focus... and good thoughts are filled with "I" 's.

[jonni inferno]

love this
one question -
you said "passed the vein of tears that fall"
did you mean -
"past the veil of tears that fall" ??

[Rapturecapture]

Hi jonni yes I did and thank you for pointing it out much appreciated!!

[jonni inferno]

np - this is a beautiful poem...

[InkStain]

This poem/song is lovely. I do agree with emipoemi about the "chorus", you really don't need it, it's really good on it's own. I enjoyed reading this, you did a good job portraying a feeling with words.

Good job! Pen on my friend!

[Rapturecapture]

Thank you for your lovely comment