Broken Angel

true experiences n sorrowful moments.......

 In the roaring of seas, in the whisper of breeze,

Standing below the twinkling stars and thundering sky,

I would love you unconditionally that would never cease…….

My eyes looking for you, flooded with tears alas,

I’m a broken angel, hoard me before I collapse……….

 

Notice my grief of being lonely, my mind is insane,

Ahhh!!!  Broken heart and awful sensation, am afflicted in pain,

Come back to me, I would hold you tight and propose again.

Those days when we were one soul…had gone astray,

Now there’s just one hope with which I can endure little bit.

I’m a wrecked foliage fallen on ground,

I’m breathing like this is my last breath,

I’m a broken angel; my delightful wings are crushed…….

 

Before my eyes would shut, before my breath would stop,

Before my hope dies off and before I shatter down to earth weeping,

Come n hold me tight, say that you love me n want me….

I had been waiting from so long; say that you need me…..

Save my soul before it leaves me and fall apart,

Am mystified whether to deceive myself or admit it lacking your presence,

Ever since you’re gone, agony is ruling wits and essence of existence,

I’m a broken angel, my life is worthless if love vanishes ……………..

 

Author's Note

My first poem....

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

You first poem was ( is ) a great success...Thank you for sharing...:).........

[DJ]

This is nicely written, I like the imagery used. A sad and emotional piece but one that is relateable.

[Rahul]

You mentioned that this's yer first poem... soo... i'd say, it's a great starting of your talent indeed, you're going good in writing's field indeed. you gotta write more and more without giving up. Yu can flourish yourself more and more writing more and more. You don't Need talent cuz, it's already you got but talent needs you now. Hey, why don't you try to write some books too, yeah, if you want then you can write to. i'd like to see and read your books i'm sure you' can do, i've seen your talent that's shining from your pieces.

Anyways, this write's again beautifully penned as usual but, as u said this;s' yer first write, so i wanna give you pat on yer back to yer this victory indeed. go on :)
All stanzas're nicely penned bt the last one stanza's powerful i think and i liked that one much indeed. 100/100.

[Vani Jalagar]

thank you Rahul:)

[Joshua Hunter]

Very good, I love the first two lines a lot. It gave me a very good picture in my head and a very good setting for the rest of the poem. Good job!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. Using love and the sea allowed the reader to fall into the poem. I could feel the sadness and feeling of emptiness in the words.
"I’m a broken angel, my life is worthless if love vanishes"
Love will keep us together or we can fall apart. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote