Geezer Wonderin'

Takes place in the south. Inspired by some old geezers I used to know in a place off of Smithville TX.

Creak creakidy creak creak.

Creak creakidy creak creak.

My chair groaned.

Adding to the radio's buzz of music.

Fast paced the music was. 

It was a slow and nice night.

Not something we looked for,

But something we seemed to have found

As we sat and crushed the cans of beer

That quickly littered the deck floor.

Nothing new.

Just us old geezers.

Remembering when old gramp

Said the same thing bout himself.

Poor ol' Cash filled our ears.

Leaving space for smooth Owens

To get our feet a goin.

No buildings haunted our eyes.

Just grass and dirt.

Far and wide.

My body was rusty from the days' work.

Like always.

But my foot sure didn't give up.

The radio slowly died as we sat in silence.

Wondering where we went wrong.

Where our adventure went.

How we became as clueless,

As slow,

As our heavenly parents.

May they rest in peace.

Finally we gave up on our thoughts.

And headed inside.

Took a while for everyone to get settled again.

Because we were all so reluctant to leave the porch.

But after an hour of TV we all made our way to bed.

Huffing and puffing ourselves to sleep.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I can relate to this, I remember parents and grandparents talking bout how thing are not like they were when they were kids, now I am experiencing things on the other end. It seems the world moves faster the older I get. Any ways, I enjoyed the write.

[Ranger Nadaly]

Thank you I appreciate this. Its great knowing people can relate to this.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome.

[Raymond Federle]

A delightful read! Enjoyed it immensely. :)

[Ranger Nadaly]

Thank you very much.

[Zan]

Bitter sweet :) I really like some of the lines you used, they said a lot with just a few words. Did you give any thought to keeping to a pattern to help the rhythm along?

[Ranger Nadaly]

Not really. I just kind of wrote what I was thinking. Do you see any pace or rhythm issues?

[Zan]

Nothing in particular :) I was just curious

[Michael Stevens]

Such an excellent poem; tells the story well!

[Ranger Nadaly]

Thank you.

[Wolfwind]

I think I may have passed by them old geezers a time or two over the years! lol
This was wonderful! It captured a momement in time and more importantly a feeling of the good ole days and the old style ways that still to this day creak along the floor boards of some old porch.
The descriptions were real and the feeling was sentimental.

What I really thought was awesome about this piece, is that you spent alot of the lines on describing what the old timers saw... It allowed us to jump into those aging feet and those squinty old eyes.

Oddly enough, I can't help but feeling connected to this piece, as there are times that I'll sit on the porch and gaze up to the stars and wonder those same things.

Great Ink!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[Ranger Nadaly]

Thank you. Its a piece I wrote from family experience.