A Trespass

I remember.

An unforgiven trespass.

A marred face.

Black polyps.

Tulips of blue.

Navy pupils submerged.

Crackles of violent red.

A salty, suffocating wave of human brine.

An abruptly contorted nose.

A crescendo of violence.

A cold wake of desertion.

Isolation

Crimson tinges of iron.

Revenge is sour bread.

Waiting patiently to rise.

An unforgiven trespass.

I remember.

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Some trespasses are best forgiven and forgotten while others cannot be so easily discarded. The rape victim may want to forgive the rapist but the trespass extends beyond the body to the heart and mind. This has powerful descriptions eloquently portraying the feelings of anger, resentment, violence and revenge. I was reminded of the song, "The Boxer" by Simon and Garfunkel while reading. "In the clearing stands a boxer and a fighter by his trade, and he carries the reminder of every glove that laid him down or cut him till he cried out, "I am leaving, I am leaving, but the fighter still remains." Highest marks on this. F.

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks I will have to check that song out

[Robert Haigh]

Some people can forgive more easily than others. Speaking for myself, it depends on the 'crime' or the 'violation.' Some people who become my enemies through foul deeds are likely to remain enemies for a long time! An inventive write!

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks you

[Chris Shaw]

Some acts you can't forget no matter how you try to blot them out. This one seems to be building in its fury for revenge. The colours tell me so. Red, spells danger. Impactful write Ranger.

Chris

[Ranger Kessel]

Thank you for the kind words

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome Ranger

[Red Brick Keshner]

In varied colourations, a seething and smouldering... "revenge is sour bread;" almost rotting, eating away at us. This is a fine poem that oozes. A very engaging read. Thanks for sharing, Ranger.

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks you for the kind words

[Betty Hermelee]

It's very difficult to forgive any kind of pain suffered, due to someone else's act; I love your colorful description of the face...."Navy pupils, crackles of violent red"... the reader doesn't know exactly what transpired, but in this poem, it's about forgiveness... whether or not to..... I believe that if I didn't forgive, I would carry these awful notions inside me forever. It is understandable to be angry, and revengeful, but in the long run, forgiveness will help these notable emotions melt away.
Very deep and thoughtful write.
Best, Betty

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks for the review

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"a somebody done somebody wrong song"

I love the line, "Revenge is sour bread" I sure wish I had made that one up...

forgiveness is divine, and yet sometimes just impossible.
really good piece, Ranger,
j.

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks you jacob

[John the Baptist]

Sinister sounding, this one. The speaker seems obsessed with some wrong done in the past and won't let it go. This bodes evil. Rage dwelt upon sooner or later overflows the container.

[Ranger Kessel]

That is wise advice.

[Poetic Phlox]

Boundaries are fines lines that are never to be crossed. In the face of brutality, the callous attackers impeded on borders, and breached upon subtle peace. No one deserves violence, and those who seek it could live to regret a trespass. Your poem is very unique and I found myself reading it over and over. And, your expressive and immersive poetry is remarkable.

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks you for the read and review

[Aura]

This is powerful. Trespassing done to their feelings, body, dignity. Anger, and sadness they feel, that can't be forgotten. Trespassing is an offence that can be dealt with easily, yet domestic violence that does more trespassing and damage while can be dealt with in the court of law, takes more time, and leaves trauma on the victim. Thanks for sharing your insightful poem.

[Ranger Kessel]

Thank you for your time

[Aura]

My pleasure

[gabrielle]

For some reason, this piece made me think of a cancer survivor. Any lingering medical condition is unforgiven trespasser.

[Ranger Kessel]

Thanks for the kind words