Empty - Hell Stands

Empty - Hell Stands

A Poem by Alexanda Corrin
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Hell is empty, earth is full...

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Hell stands, 
Silent in its post grave tenor, 
A graveyard makes more sound - than that of hells gates. 

The gates to hell loom, 
But they are open.  

Fields lay empty, unattended, 
Rivers flow on, uninterrupted, 
Yes, hell has been abandoned, left behind 
For a place much darker than hell ever was.  

The daemons have fled,  
7 horrors wander all paths of life,  
(Mayhem) 
4 horsemen have more work now than ever, 
(Chaos) 
All of the daemons are gone now. 

Hell stands emptied, 
Forgotten to many, 
Remembered by a choice few, 
Earth spins on, uninterrupted. 

Hell is empty, 
Earth is full to the brim.

© 2015 Alexanda Corrin


Author's Note

Alexanda Corrin
I this is the second time writing this so sorry if there are errors, I am a bit annoyed at my phone right now. This is my first actual poem and only the third edit so I apologies if it isn't any good, I would really appreciate critique especially constructive criticism as I want to work on my writing. Also, ignore the Japanese in the photo, it's part of the book I'm writing in.

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I like this.The ending suggest that earth has become the hell of our own making, and worse than anything hell had to offer. It has a pace to it that makes you read it more slowly and concentrate on the overall feel of the piece. Earth spins on, uninterrupted...great line.
I really enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexanda Corrin

9 Years Ago

Hallo, your response to my review on one of your poems spurned me into action, so I will attempt to .. read more
alifeacoustic

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome.



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The sooner Jerusalem's gates open ... the sooner the dead walk the earth ... the sooner we can go home.

"A graveyard makes more sound - than that of hells gates", I love this line ... it almost make you think of the prophecy "when hell is full the dead will roam the earth", well, granted in your poem it's been emptied, but emptied of demons as though between the lost souls there are no more room left for them.

Do you mean the first poem that you wrote or the first poem you posted ... I could truly not tell that it was your first, it is so well executed.

Thank you for sharing it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alexanda Corrin

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for the review, that's a new outtake on this poem, I like it! This isn't the first poem.. read more
The post apocalyptic feeling that your poem provokes captivated me, alongside with its outwordly and clear cut imagery.! Never did I expect a poem on hell to be so intriguing and alluring, excellent piece! You make one wander to barren lands and actually see some of the last demons pass him/her by.! The structure in the climax indicates the gravity of the issue and actually makes a critique on our chaotic, every day reality! Loved it in case you haven't noticed, hope I've helped :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alexanda Corrin

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! Yeah, I tend to add a lot of detail in what I write - I remember I had thi.. read more
Hahaha. Hell on earth. What could be more perfect? I like ideas of duality so this aspect of the poem really appealed to me. Note that your phone turned hell to he'll on line 9. I hate phones too. Using one now and always do typos looking like a gumby.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alexanda Corrin

9 Years Ago

Thanks from the review, I think I got the idea from a quote about hell being empty so that's where t.. read more
Zugzwang

9 Years Ago

You're welcome .
I like this.The ending suggest that earth has become the hell of our own making, and worse than anything hell had to offer. It has a pace to it that makes you read it more slowly and concentrate on the overall feel of the piece. Earth spins on, uninterrupted...great line.
I really enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexanda Corrin

9 Years Ago

Hallo, your response to my review on one of your poems spurned me into action, so I will attempt to .. read more
alifeacoustic

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome.

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Added on October 27, 2015
Last Updated on October 30, 2015
Tags: Hell, earth, philosophy, life, death, religious references, dark, obscure, sorry

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Alexanda Corrin
Alexanda Corrin

Sydney, NSW, Australia



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Hallo all, I'm an Australian woman who has a lot of hobbies and is obsessed with reading, particularly Fanfiction. Random stuff about me: I love books, anime/manga and marvel's movies! The movie.. more..

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