Sitting in the rain.

the stuggles of life.

Sitting in the Rain

You sit in the rain      Wondering how you got here                                Watching your life pass from 0 to 60    

Every hour a day                                                      Every minute a second

You sit in the rain           Pondering your past                                                          Your present                       What lead to this?                This chapter, this story

You sit in a ditch                                   A trench                               With rain pouring in

This rain is not but a metaphor     Of your troubles                                                        This rain is the names, the slander, the putdowns of your peers

Soon, this trench will be a lake                                  Drowning you in your sorrows                             Pushing you rotting corpse to sea                               Where you will be forgotten

However, with every storm comes a rainbow           With every black sky, a sunshine                              With every downpour, a glittering waterfall

Your life is that sunshine      And all you need is faith to shine through            Leading you to a new day

 

Author's Note

I had some help writing this :)

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

This is so unique and wonderful!!! I loved the whole rain metaphor (actually, I just love rain period). The whole layout was really really really really really really really really really really neato :D I'd never have thunk (or thought if you're too boring to use 'thunk')....wait...what...ok then.
There were a few...tiny...really small...itty bitty....teeny....GIGANTIC mistakes. Can you figure which word/phrase doesn't fit with the rest???
a) few
b) tiny
c) really small
d) itty bitty
e) teeny
g) GIGANTIC

Don't know why I did that :P Wow am I on one today. Just like my cat!!!
P.S. Loved this!!!
P.P.S. I love the rain!!! Did I already mention that?? TOO BAD!!!!
P.P.P.S. The answer is "g" in case you didn't know :D

[Silver Tree]

I really liked the layout of this, it surprised me, and the poem was good too. =)

[Ian]

That was cool!
I could never begin to understand what the person under me has said.
To shorten it I will just simply say...
Great job. ;)

[Ame Rain]

WoW , i really like it , the wise and the emotions that the words make it when i read , it's nice girl .
Hope to read more :) .

[Sujash I. Purna]

this is a wonderful poem. Loved the pattern as if the lines, they were falling like rain. One doesn't know the charm a rain can create unless they feel it. I understand the writer feels it too. Arpeggio-wise lines remind me of the drops of rain. Lovely work indeed!

[Aarontastic]

The way this is typographically structured immediately catches the reader's attention, and besides just looking really cool, it forces itself to be read in a disjointed way, which makes it seem like fragmented thoughts held together by a common theme of sadness. The ending part of the poem is more upbeat, and it represents how we encourage ourselves to keep going in the midst of troubles and sadness. Personally, I liked the first part of the poem better, even though it was sadder: I felt like it was more original and had more impact. The ending part which gets upbeat feels a little more cliched, especially the last two lines, but overall it is still a really excellent poem so nice job =]

[roy mccarthy]

great write here!

[Karina Anderson]

It looks kind of cool and relates to my mood/day. Nice job :]

[Jose Ramirez]

it looks weird, but hey-don't judge a book by its cover haha it was nice "Alice" xP