The Distance of Love

Two hearts kept apart by life.

The Distance of Love

Here I am

There you are

At the end of a field so far

Filled with dangers lurking

It’s all working

To keep us apart

I know it’s some kind of art

But here I am

And I’m not with you

So very aching to have what’s due

It’s the love I feel

Knowing it’s what we both want to steal

Yet you are so far away

This love can never sway

If I was smart

I’d know that’s art

But how can two hearts

Being torn apart

Be any type of art

When all I can feel is the pain

Coming down as a rain

Am I insane?

But the shattered pieces yearn

And all I can do is mourn.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

You have some, seemingly easy, but really gorgeous lines in there that play off some other ones that compliment those line's strengths!! You voice very real emotions that are not always easy to write out, and then you put such cool phrases and lines into selfless bits of beauty!! Beautiful Alice. xoxo -Mark

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

beautiful work
nice flow and imagery
I loved the rhyme of it
among other things lol

[Ian]

That was awesome!
Amazing write!
That's all I can say.
Awesome, Amazing

You're not insane,
It's just your gain...
Your heartfelt one
Yet so far way,
Of you...
You can't think clear,
Without him near...

Lovely one. Love is cruel, if it's on distance
But it can be the greatest one, if you come together ;)

[Jose Ramirez]

great job alice!!!!!

This is so beautiful, I really enjoyed this, I can feel the emotion pour out, Nicely written.

[~Lizzy♬]

Omg! This is so beautiful! I really loved the deep emotion and love throughout the whole poem. I like someone that's 2 hrs away from me, so I understand this poem. :/

~Lizzard~