Turning "you" into "gone"

I want to be all alone

I want to see nothing of you on my pillow

You hurt every cell of my body, every sense

You are something my eyes cannot stand

I hate your smell crawling down my skin

Your voice is hurting my ears

Your heart turned into something

I’m afraid to feel

I want you to leave smart as you came

Your heart is proud

Your lips are selfish

Your mind’s beyond my prejudice.

Reviews

[Don Shaw]

wow, i love this

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"I hate your smell crawling down my skin"
I can definitely feel the disgust of the writer with this line. In fact, it feels almost like rape.
You really had my stomach with this one, however short and simple it was.
I, too, have a pillow I would like renewed with untainted fragrance.

[Bone and Brine]

Wow.This is really good. I like it.

[Steph K]

I like the use of symbol and emotions in this poem. " Your heart is proud" " Your lips are selfish" It is sensual and has so much of a deeper meaning to it.

[Lily Mae]

Isn't funny how their scent lingers on a pillow,
or you actually feel them pump through your veins..
Saying "I’m afraid to feel
I want you to leave smart as you came
Your heart is proud
Your lips are selfish
Your mind’s beyond my prejudice." is just perfect.. xx

[Becky C Strukamp]

Powerful write of hostile emotions toward a once loved one. You penned it beautifully.