Wet remains...

For a contest using the 10 words which revived my muse...

She treads lightly

Fathoming the layered darkness

Streaked by flashes of lightening

Crackling mangled branches

Wet surroundings

No stirring of life

To dispel deathly stillness

No cloak to shield the shiver

As she drags the remains

Of the woman within

 

Reviews

[None]

This is absolutely beautiful...the way you enveloped the words to form such a profound and meaningful poem! You have such a splendid gift (I always have known that.) Most poems using 10 words for a contest come out forced or out of sorts but this is not the case at all here! I wish you the very best in the contest with your expressive poem. I'm saving this to favorites as I can relate to the deeper meaning here regarding the revival of a muse!

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

This is very nice poem with meaningful words of highly enlighting the inner message. My best wishes.

[imawriter]

Made me want to go grab a blanket. It's a beautifully and effectively written poem

[An owl on the moon]

This has such a stunning beauty. Your usage of the words for the contest blends them in like raindrops caught in a puddle... merging and mingling perfectly. Wonderful rich read, and the last lines are a powerfully vivid ending.

[LSS]

As always your work is suburb and most perfectly done. I'm glad I checked back to see what you are doing lately. Always love what you write.
Lar

[Helena]

Bravo! This was absolutely stunning the way you used the 10 words so
seamlessly. Well done! Thank you for submitting this to Tovli's contest ~ Helena

[Life Calling!!!]

WOW!!! I mean wow!!! Awesome how your profundity bowls me over every time! I have always admired this capability of yours where you use the minimum of words to bring out the maximum of meaning!

And I totally agree with the 'reviving of muse' thing...you know how my muse is being revived...and I can empathise with you...

As usual, I love your work! Keep it up, girl!

Loads of love...
God Bless!

It has been so long since you have written, but it was all worth the wait.

These are pristinely written, with imagery given uniquely yours. Their soul and signature carries you.

Their message is well established, as with all your pieces.

Such poetry is timeless, wonderful fundamentals.

A wonderful piece.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Wow! What a breathtaking piece of writing....
You are indeed one of the most talented writers here at this site and there is no doubt over that!
This is again and very strong and deep piece of writing with such a brilliant usage of words at few places.

"As she drags the remains
Of the woman within " - I loved these lines the most, they concluded the entire piece very well!

Great piece of writing it is and best of luck for the contest :)

[Robert Luna]

I really loved the way this flowed. You have once again shown your true artistic nature. You paint a image so true to life as I can as if I could reach out and touch its very essences. Very moving in deed glad to see your words once more.


Great Job!!!!!!!!