Slippery Sleep

 

 

Sleep winked at me and scurried past my window

There he was swinging his legs on my window sill

Then he jumped up and down on the little couch beside

I looked at him appealing that it was time for bed

He shot out of reach and danced a little jig

Tickled my feet, pulled my hair and hummed

"Catch me if you can"

No matter how much I tossed and turned

He wouldn't come to me

My eyes were smarting with exasperation

I just slumped back giving up

I let my thoughts take over

I don't know when the naughty elf sneaked up

Snuggled beside me

Gently closed my eyelids and lulled me into oblivion

When the sun interrupted our cozy companionship

He just wouldn't let me go

What a task it was to yank myself out of bed!

He sat on the bed sulking that I had to go

"Serves you right for playing truant"

I said staring at him longingly

I had to get going

The day was beckoning!

Reviews

[Satine]

This is a cute and playful piece. I'd pare it down a bit perhaps by combining sentences where ever possible and then this line doesn't read quite right;

"Gently closed my eyelids and lulled me into oblivion"

Somehow "Gently", "lulled" and "oblivion" seem too contradictory.

Satine

[An owl on the moon]

This was so unique and playful, such a joy to read! The personification was perfect and your expressions make it come alive! Wonderful work!!!

Craig

[Kevin Andros]

Wow! Such a cute and nice story! And how true indeed! When we yearn to sleep it doesn't come, and when we need to wake up, sleep won't let us go!

Such a naughty elf, Sleep.

Nice write. ~KA~