A Rain Drenched Day

It was so difficult to yank myself out of bed this morning.The rumbling clouds , the dark skies the torrential rain outside my window pane was setting the holiday mood in. Just the day to laze around !

A rain drenched day!

Clouds billowing in the sky

People scurrying past

Huddled under

The canopy of umbrellas

Splashing puddles

Hapless birds shaking wet feathers

The sun seems a sleepy head

Not yet up and about

Lazing around

Beneath a foggy blanket

Today is the day

For curling up my feet

Sipping a steaming cup of tea

Sitting with friends

Soaking in laughter and chatter

Or lilting melodies

Munching goodies

But here I am

At my office desk!

 

 

Reviews

[Carole]

I love this, Raj. I always like your use of pictures. I am slowly learning how to add pictures to my pieces, but to be quite honest, I am rather computer illiterate. I have to be told how to do it, and then shown, to grasp it. Where do you find such wonderful pictures?

This is utterly lovely. I want to come have a cup of tea with you and explore India after the rain stops. Your sentiments are exactly mine...I love to sit and have a cup of coffee or cocoa and read or visit during such a time. You paint such a beautiful picture here-so inviting to the reader.

Here are a few of my favorite phrases:

Clouds billowing in the sky

Huddled under
The canopy of umbrellas

Hapless birds shaking wet feathers

Beneath a foggy blanket

Soaking in laughter and chatter
Or lilting melodies

There you have it! Almost your ENTIRE poem, mind you. :-)

Your use of the English language is exquisite, Raj. I hope one day to write as well as you. :-) One thing I love about being on this sight though is being amongst writers that are better than me that I can glean from. It is important to be challenged. You must have been writing for years. Do you mind if I ask how old you are? You look in your late 20's-early 30's. (Hope this is not offensive to you. :-) I don't mean to me, if so.

Bountiful Blessings, my friend!

[Natalie C]

Ha don't we all know that feeling all to well? Wonderfully written, loved the playfulness of this piece just seemed to work so perfectly with the whole rainy day "blues" concept.

Think you should have called in sick, I know I would have been tempted too.

[Travis Lawrence]

I get such a soothing feeling from this piece, and it ends with a sigh.

"lilting melodies" is a beautiful phrase.

-Travis

[Wolfwind Words]

The images you paint! I was taken to the window in your words to watch the rain fall and smell the aroma of tea rising from the kettle.

I really like this! It flowed well. And i agree with carole, the pictures add an element thats outstanding!

Great Write! :)

[None]

Yes, I can see why a "Candle in the wind" would oppose the rain so much!!
You take a bad day and in thoughts decide the best plans. Sadly enough, you were at your office but could visit that gentle place of comfort and coziness.
Your whole poem lingers and paints such a prominent picture. I do love the pictures with this! They set the mood but are still secondary to your wonderful words!

[Robert Luna]

I love the rain and storms it is actually the only time I can sleep well. Your description of the world around you is both perfect and very visual. I could imagine the world still turning as you set and capture the beauty of the moments around. I think that is one of the best things is to be able to see the beauty in the moment like this.



Great Job!!!!!!

[Nicholas Hallows]

Yes, I know where you're coming from with this piece. I remember when I used to work on the 4th floor of an office and would watch the people surrying about out in the rain wishing I could be at home lazing around.
Its simplicity also gives it a warmth that works very well and adds to the tone of the poem.
Nice. NH

[Simmering embers]

Very nice...The poem has so much innocence and simple joy in it. Reminds me of our childhood days when we would all just huddle in a room and chat endlessly for hours about silly nothings and how we would make songs with absurd lyrics and keep singing them in equally silly tunes. your poem seems to open a door of happy nostalgia...Do you remember those days Didibhai? Do you remember the Summer Holidays song?

[Floating on the feather..]

Hahaha...That's a pretty good one.

I did have the same feeling when i saw the overcast sky in the morning.... The clouds thundering hard as if daring me not to go out. And i was so much keen on not taking up the challenge and sleeping underneath my cover like the most poor little girl.

But alas, they all went away, the rain, the dark spread, the thundering clouds.....

And i had to come to office.

The writing is very lovely here. And very nostalgic too.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really beautiful and awesome imagery, I loved the imagery part a lot in it..
And I agree for the fact that weather these days is really playing a devil's game by being so beautiful and whelming..
Even I live here in western part of our country..
But fortunately we are facing the same kind of weather and it is not bounding me but actually giving me positive energy by filling my mind with optimistic thoughts to start a new day and to enjoy with my friends in college(obviously by spending time at outdoors)
lolz.. :D
ok! coming back to write.
I found it really brilliant with an amazing flow which make the reader to experience the same feel and relaxation..

"But here I am
At my office desk!"
lolz! :D
Well, I can imagine..It's really too hard to work all the long in this weather!
Aawww! :( :(

Also I loved both the pics...they are going very well with the write
Awesome work..as always :)