Do you know?

Do you know a clawing clammy pain

That keeps gnawing at your heart

Sits inside you stubbornly

Makes you numb and blank

Stare without seeing

Throbs at your temples

Tingles at your fingertips

Smarts in your eyes

Gets stuck in your throat

 

You try in vain

To submerge it with laughter

Mask it with a smile

Ease it with words

Fight back the tears

Or just let it flow

Scream in desperation

Diffuse it with logic

Share it with loved ones

Talk it out

 

Nothing seems to work

Guess you just wait till it goes

 

Do you know a remedy?

 

Reviews

[None]

I think sometimes we get stuck in times of pain and it feels like we are in another dimension--a type of imprisonment. We wonder why it has to happen to us. In time we see the various reasons but the present is so tragically painful. Your picture with this is so heart wrenching! You really did an unbelievable thing with your poem by making the emotions real to the reader. Very intense and sends a haunting feeling up my spine, wishing I could help the pain.

[Natalie C]

Glad you submitted this piece my friend, it was really nice wrapping my mind around this piece again.
Well I think my previous review said everything, therefore I am not going to go into that again except for thank you for allowing me to read this again

[vanishing]

I love how the ending entwines
with the graphic.. so Brilliant.
powerful, ascending
a Pleasure to read
thanks

Numbness, a state of bliss...

As in all my reviews, I find that you have a good use of form and choice of words. This was written well.

The message is imparted well.

The pattern used for this poem is different from the others that I have reviewed, this shows good flexibility in skill.

This is a good read

[Natalie C]

They say "Time heals all"
Ha, according to me time is over rated. There is no remedy, there is no escape. It devours you, your emotions, your life. You learn to cope, telling yourself that you are ok but never really heal. You will never really feel the same the day before.

You did a amazing job in describing those emotions which goes with something like that, I guess some people are just more lucky than others finding a way to cope

[Wolfwind Words]

Walking memory lane, does this for me. Seeing the happiness of the past, and wishing it could come back to the now.
You pose a question and that's the answer as i can provide. Pain, and how it effects, is different in everywalk of humanity, down to all individual humans, and animals.

Only faith and belief in oneself, and leading a happy positive day to day existance keeps me away from feeling that since of sorrow.

Great Write. makes a person think! :)

[Going...going...gone!]

Very very intense and thought-provoking....I'm running out of words to review this piece....I truly salute your capacity in bringing out such strong emotions in such few and such simple words and images...and the way you select pictures to enhance the veryessence....

God Bless You!!!!

PS: Just a lil suggestion....I though the line "Stare without seeing" should have been "Stares without seeing", considering that all other first words in the same stanza begin with an 's'...

[Kelly D. Burris]

Very thought provoking piece, which I thought was well written.
I like how you go into the description, but not to be totally absorbed in that, and still seek some insight from the listener.
Nice work.
Kelly

[The wanderer...]

Beautiful ... I think most of us have been there ...

Remedy ? from my experience, time heals all !

[Emily B]

I know that feeling. Been there a time or two or ten thousand it seems like. . . I know no remedy. Blue skies and sunshine sometimes help a little though.

[Floating on the feather..]

The last sentence posing a question with no possible answer is brilliant here.

Time could an answer with a bleak possibility.

A non-fugitive pain cripples all senses within and makes us as incapable of living life as a fallen green leaf.
Great write. Very profound thoughts.