Incongruous Race

Just thought of a twist with the old rabbit tortoise parable...ofcourse the rabbit is more from Alice in Wonderland...just a topsy turvy fantasy

The bespectacled rabbit ran

Saying"Catch me if you can"

Its tail was bobbing up and down

Suddenly it began to frown

The tortoise wasn't in the race any more

Its aged paws were sore

"Hey I'll give you a handicap"

Rabbit said " Come on old chap!"

Tortoise said "Cross the finish line..

To see you win the pleasure is mine"

Reviews

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Wow, I really like this twist to the old tale. What excellent pictures you have with this! It's all very special. I like how the tortoise lets the rabbit win. It's as if the tortoise is saying, "I've got better things to do than to keep this race up with you!" Your poem is precious!

[Jack of Aces]

fabulous ! what else can I say :)

[thecoolone52]

very nice work... it was almost like a teamwork type poem.... Almost who can be the better person kinda deal i really enjoyed it... its like a good piece for kids.... nice job!!!

[Going...going...gone!]

Its so simple and yet so beautiful...
Are there still people like the tortoise? Who selflessly give away their feted position?

I'm not so sure there are...but, if there are, they can sure take a lesson from here....

Slow and steady may win the race...but not by actually winning it....like this little tortoise here....I think he's the winner at the end of it all.

Cute pictures to go with the poem...This piece is really different and unique...

May God Bless You!

[Nicholas Hallows]

A very sweet little piece.

[E. M. Murren]

Such a lovely thought. I love beautiful gestures of selflessness. Fine work.

[Floating on the feather..]

A lovely parody of the old parable... Funny.

The smart tortoise of course chose the best here....A laid back one, like me.

Good one.

[Tania Leigh]

The tortoise was the wise one...

This is great.....thank you for making me smile :-)

[Blackbirdsong]

A very funny parody of the old story here. The meter is slightly off in in this couplet though -

"The tortoise wasn't in the race any more
Its aged paws were sore"

I think you have an extra beat in the "tortoise" line.

Well done write.

[Brenda Sue]

Very cute and fun. I love it and the picture is so cute too. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

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Love the picture, love the banter and love the child in you...
Gorgeous Raj...
Cheers,
Helen :-)