The Pied Piper

This is not the piper who tricked the mice and led them to the sea.This is the piper who played of his own volition and gave of his own bounty.The swarming mice lost themselves.

 

I had a pied piper

Who charmed my thoughts away

With his melodies

His tinkling laughter

His heartwarming smile

Which lit up my world

He liberated my spirit

My thoughts followed him

As he pranced along

Playing his myriad tunes

He unveiled new horizons

Which enticed them along

He would play his pipe

Whenever I would ask

I was no connoisseur

Yet he would let me taste

New flavors and intoxications

My thoughts swarmed after him

Wafted by the bliss

As he walked along

With a jig in his step

Then those swarming thoughts

Came to the brink

They plunged into the sea

And are now bobbing up and down

In deep dark swirling waters

 

Reviews

[Floating on the feather..]

Very enchanting and charming.
Its miraculous, how a person in your life gives you a revived entity, subjugates your thoughts only to give them impregnable liberty, creates a new horizon and encourages you beyond every horizon.

I loved the concluding part.

Then those swarming thoughts
Came to the brink
They plunged into the sea
And are now bobbing up and down
In deep dark swirling waters

Is this just a thought or is this a tribute to someone?? (wink)

[Mayukh Das]

ma'm.... its beautiful.......
1 question???? does d poem watever is written.... or has smthng deeper to it???
i mean..... it sounded a bit like Dylan's Tamborine man........ which has a meaning deeper than the words.....

[Robert Luna]

This piece was wonderful. I liked the idea of the piper having such a powerful allure about him that you gave with perfect detail to allow my mind's eye see him clearly and perfectly. This was an enchanting mixture of visuals and beautiful words. I really enjoyed this read thank you.



Great JOb!!!!!!

[saint]

heyy!!hi
i wudnt be writing much bout ur style or the pen-genius u are,thats already an understatement..wat i wud like to say is i read the pied piper long long time bak wen i was just 9 or 10..and just have fragments of the story in memory..but tel u wat,i dont want u to tell me the story,this one's better i wud like to believe..so simple and straight,yet so meaningfully touching!!i guess u gave pied piper the real essence of his name!!whoever ur pied piper is,he must be a happy guy to have YOU follow him, anywhere whereever..
happy life :)

[An Ordinary Woman]

He would play his pipe
Whenever I would ask
I was no connoisseur
Yet he would let me taste
New flavors and intoxications... I love the feel of this piece, it is light and whimsical but the message is a good solid one ... very inspirational, I enjoyed it. I always enjoy your writing and I need to apologize for my delay in getting here to read it.

[Wolfwind Words]

It brought to mind the tales of wandering bards of old europe, who would entice all that they played for.
Great Job!

[laceyjane23]

I liked this piece, the interpretation that i got from it was that there are always going to be people that can lead us astray, but in the end we are responsible for following that person. I think that this is a great piece and i like the picture that you included with it.
laceyjane

[Tania Leigh]

Ooooh, I like this! For some reason it reminds me of "Magic Man" by Heart.

A great write, and the pic lends itself well to it.

[Helen]

What a nice tale, gee who is this mystry man you write of..

I hope those dark waters are a good place to be, it seems you two have shared quite a love.
Sorry I may not give quite the comments of the other Helen, but I do very much love this poem.

[Amor-de-angel]

Beuatiful done, you had me following with such great imagery

[Going...going...gone!]

Enchanting...Hypnotic...

Just what one would expect from a pied piper...especially one who has come not to rid one of something, but to give one something so special that even if one has
"...plunged into the sea
And are now bobbing up and down
In deep dark swirling waters"
one is free from all bonds that tie one down, in a state of such liberation that life seems to be worthwhile after all...

Brilliantly written...how do you come up with such images? Keep up the awesome work ma'am, and keep sharing it with us all...Thank You!

May God Bless You!