Shed your Guilt

 

When you feel guilty

That you have immersed me in melancholy

You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad

To feel forlorn

To regret the lost euphoria

 

If instead you were exasperated

That my misery was baseless

Chided me for feeling so

Dismissed my gloom

It would be more reassuring

That there was some substance

Some reciprocity

Even if not synonymy of response

It did make a difference

It wasn’t just an elusive dream

Like a wisp of smoke in the horizon

The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky

Which fades away further if approached

 

You gave of yourself so effortlessly

You gave me such unbridled liberty

It was like walking in the rain

My parched soul was quenched

I breathed so easy

And felt rejuvenated

My being came alive

 

So this guilt diminishes the divinity

Of these ethereal passions and emotions

Shed it and be free.

Reviews

[Floating on the feather..]

So true the line
"guilt diminishes the divinity"

But at times its so so difficult to fight the guilt,it is just like quick sand. Engulfs you completely.

I like the metaphors,the poetic expressions, the eloquent lines.

The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached

Great line.

Sorry couldn't understand the 3rd stanza initially, but now....it's fine.

[laceyjane23]

very well written! i enjoyed reading it.
laceyjane

[Michael X]

your writing is enlightening, really in this regards,
So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free
reading your words brought a sense of peace and understanding, in way of outlook, one can really
feel the impression of the soul being conveyed, and the core understanding of guilt, and how
to be able to shed the emotional tranparencies subject to the terms of condtion, and that being
how the heart is able to control, instead of being able to control the heart, the opening stanza
reminds me of gaining through an experience, i feel it as being wromnged by someone close,
and knowing how to deal with such circumstances in tranquil, meditative way of thinking. very nice work

[Carole]

You gave of yourself so effortlessly
You gave me such unbridled liberty
It was like walking in the rain
My parched soul was quenched
I breathed so easy
And felt rejuvenated
My being came alive

So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free.

Very nicely done, Raj! Shedding guilt is divine. For the Christian it comes through repentance, something we must do often, even daily. I choose to walk in that freedom. I've lived both ways and have come to find out, I prefer freedom. It enables me to see more clearly, and to walk in the truth! As always, an amazing and tantalizing write!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! Again such a lovely piece..very well crafted!
"I breathed so easy
And felt rejuvenated
My being came alive"
I loved these lines the most :)

I also like the metaphors and the remorse feel of guilt which has been beautifully described throughout the write!
But, I think so it's the ending which took all the credit as it left a deep impression upon my mind even after reading the piece..
Very well written :)

[forfila]

Oh wow, beautiful,,,,I love it,, I need not say more. =)

Love from me.

[Jet Lag]

i needed to read this. i've been beating myself up about something and it is time to take the advice of your last stanza:
So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free.

[Conrad Wrobel]

This poem well with a big sigh at the end. Wonderful, beautiful imagery! You have some fantastic metaphors in here. And the ending wrapped it up so eloquently.
Cheers! XD
Conrad Wrobel

[Tania Leigh]

I loved it right from the opening lines:

"When you feel guilty
That you have immersed me in melancholy
You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad"

A refreshing approach to the end of love.....nicely done.

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This is where I get serious, the mirage of sea meets sky looming further away on approach...great metaphor right there. the guilt trip from someone having themselves a pity party at your expense! I'm with you shed it now!!! And shed him too, he's not worth it.
Helen :(

[Going...going...gone!]

It is so true...when you say that

"When you feel guilty
That you have immersed me in melancholy
You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad"

Oftentimes, I have a fight with my guy, and then I feel miserable, and he acts guilty, and I feel even worse...
You have put down in strong words every moment of that feel...

Your images are breath-taking...
I love your work.

Thank you so much, Ma'am, for sharing such talent with us...God Bless You!