Tryst with loss

Does hiding necessarily means protecting and saving? Can you lose something which you always hide?

From the deepest, and the darkest nook,

alleys and mazes of my thoughts,

Hidden  from facebook, 

Not allowed even in my dreams. 

I have hidden her from myself too.

Is she shameful or is she immoral?

Dogmatic, academic, eerie or fearful?

So tender, so nimble, that

the faintest touch.

Create tenacious memories.

Lest it can’t be stopped.

I am never looking,

yet I keep finding.

Right now, I am waiting.

Just to lose her,  forever.

Reviews

[KeeD]

This was deep, had really nice structure and flow and good use of words. Stand out line for me would be "Is she shameful or is she immoral? Dogmatic, academic, eerie or fearful?" Say's a lot, lets the readers mind imagine exactly what kind of a persona the girl might have on the author. I like poems belonging to this kind of genre, the poignant / dark section of writing. Good job. Can't wait to read more of your work.

[Rajkamal]

Thanks. It was your comments that encouraged me to post further in this site. Thus as a gesture, I would go against the advice of most poets, and let out a secret: the stand out lines that you mention were actually placed just to lend the poem some amount of ambiguity and to assign a certain kind of symmetry across the verses. But surprisingly, those turned out to be the corner stone of the poem, as most of my serious readers told me. Thus, the poem became, not only the way I look at my surroundings and within but also served as means to enrich my own understanding of myself, and thus, my surroundings, through the reader's way of looking and feeling at the poem.

[KeeD]

:D indeed i'm glad you added to to give it that structural edge but it itself made such an integral part of the poem and stood out for me

[hardik]

Awesome :-)

[Dream Mistress]

amazing

[Rajkamal]

Thanks for the praise.

[Dream Mistress]

welcome