Adieu

To long memories, gone!

Adieu

Layers of time,

With you being stunned

In hypnotic shrill,

The first Encounter and your fantasy in me…

 

Literature exposed in open parentheses,

No colons, no inversions,

A figurative luster

With unspoken desire in silent rhythm

Pause…action…pause…action

While you too unveiled your senses…

 

To reminisce that afterwards �"

Gateway of touches, glistening to

Shape up imperfection in something unbuttoned,

Something that creates cheers!

 

Where are you?

What made you take so long to stand unobserved on the other side and think of us?

 

We were two to create one in one single pause

You shined; you inclined, if I’m not mistaken,

You doing your jig all along

 

Are you scared standing in front?

Didn’t we see each other like this before…’bare’?

Pointing out on your body you said,

“You remember, you mentioned once the portion in me should be chiseled out?”

‘Yes, I remember!’

“It’s gone,

I’m now the slender

I’m new to sleep

I’m the desire, manifold in someone’s gestures,

I’m the action beheld…

Remember, I’ve become the one you always mentioned…”

 

‘I do

I do, but for someone…not for me!

My ever sought desire

I do! Not for us…’

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

So stunning... so richly woven in the fabric of remembrances... there is so much emotion and memory flooding your words... your thoughts... beautifully bittersweet in the breathing, my friend... an enchantment...

[tuvi]

Raja,

This is quite refine work .... loved the way you introduced the topic and how in second stanza you use stress release stress pattern......
the impact is very clear the way you put forward questions in between the lines .....
and conclusion has been quite strong the way you stressed I do ! not for us .....

Lovely write up ...keep writing and giving us readers such delightful beautiful piece of works !!

thanks for share !

Cheers!
Tuvi

[Raja]

when a person writes, he writes to soothe him first as I take it that way and that it is his thought. But when that write up is reviewed, people so many times comprehend differently what writer did not even think; still, that is satisfying as it opens an avenue that he himself did not think. But he is happy when someone gets his thought from his writing. So I am happy that you get what I intended... thanks again for the lovely review!

[Ruth]

Remarkable writing love! This holds so much emotion throughout, a wonderful piece to delve into and find myriad thoughts and visions xoxo