Lock n' Key

'The day is not far, when you kept yourself ready for us..."

 

Lock n’ Key

 

You tie my eyes with black cloth

I see the darkness as never before,

But I feel some ups and downs as I

Start my journey like a navvy with

A naïve touch—

 

On the other, you are in the same dark divine,

As that inexplicable to me in the beginning, the

Moment I could not see you,

My dear, oh! What a must!!

 

Hands on hands

Flesh on flesh

Toes on toes, and the other one

Deep inside the as it goes through a dark alley

And then stops for decades and

Creates stories…

 

And now we are the fossils

Only, a gentle touch-key can open this lock!

Reviews

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

very powerful piece of writing... nicely done

[Gandré]

the essential impulses of your poem are the song of your wishes to convince her, it is this gently noticeble development of encouraging her to come nearer. Such a cultivated quality of texture here and a consistency of surface...of inviting for some more.. it is like a peaceful music fo lute and viols short circuiting any sense. beautiful.

[Pauline Marie Daley]

You have such unique ideas. I really liked this poem. Especially the last two lines. Awesome job. :-)

[Imperfection]

Quite an intriguing write. I like how your words create such vivid imagery.

[An owl on the moon]

Powerfully emotive and moving! Your images transport us in time and place... Wonderful write!

Craig

[Fran Marie]

al ovely piece of writing quite beautifully penned ~Fran Marie

[The Autumn Faerie]

Wow, this is simply beautiful work, you have here.

Well done!

[Vanessa]

The last line was a great conclusion that mockedthe ways of the rest of the words.
I noticed that.
There were few grammatical errors, but it was a pretty good poem.
Keep up the work.

//VK