Nervous System

'For better, for worse...'

 

Nervous System

 

For better you see

                      You find me

 

For also worse,

                      You find me…

 

For the myth and magic

                      Love that breaks

                      Apart my heart into

                      Four unsolicited parts—

 

       One for you

       Two for you

       Three for you

       Four for us!

 

For worse you search,

                      You find me

 

For also better

                      WE are there!!

Reviews

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

i like the poem but i would get rid of the 'also's you have in the piece - both seem to take something away from the two lines...

[Christina2]

Great set up, love the unique style.
As for the words, I hope this finds you in the better category. :)

[Vanessa]

I loved the wording and the wording's arrangement.
It gave me a nice essence of some sort of 1930s litterature(HUGE compliment!!)
Great poem.

//Vanessa Alyse

[Ray Hamilton]

Nervous System
Don't be nervous just write from the heart LOL
Good write Ray { Not a Poet }

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is quite fascinating actually :) i really like this piece.

"
For the myth and magic
Love that breaks
Apart my heart into
Four unsolicited parts-"

like that part the most. i like the sections of the poem. and then the way it breaks into sections of the heart.