Buried In The Nude

A journey to the after-life.

I closed my eyes and the world scattered
Buried in the nude
Nothing mattered

Through the earth, pulled down under
Constricted, blind
Torn asunder

Bias, bigotry; all decried
Emancipated, duplicated
Dragged to the other side.

Reviews

[char]

I love the first two stanzas. Those two are cool.

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and very evocative, but I feel like the ending needs some work. It doesn't seem to stand up to the buildup you presented in the first two stanzas, and it seems a little formulaic. You have a nice presentation and it's definitely worth reading, but I'd consider working on that last bit.

[durrya]

A real life nightmare.

Amazing concept.