Let Me Be Alone With Me

I love life/I love people. When alone I think of both. The noise of life can be overwhelming. It is in solitude I can see and understand things more clearly..

i wish i was

a bird with wings

to sail above

everything

high above

the homeless camps

broken people

exit ramps

take my chances

above the clouds

look down upon

the weary crowds

let me glide

above it all

the greed and hate

the shopping mall

 

because i don't need a lover

i don't need a friend

i don't need you to lie for me

hold my hand or pretend

i want to ride upon the breeze

let it guide my destiny

i just need a heart i know

let me be alone with me

 

i wish i was

a bird with wings

looking down

on wedding rings

pushed in back

of musty drawers

with musty dreams

of moon lit shores

i want to fly

beyond the sight

of everyone

who hurts for spite

above the wars

fought for greed

a world that's lost

it's dignity

 

because i don't need a lover

i don't need a friend

i don't need you to lie for me

hold my hand or pretend

i want to ride upon the breeze

let it guide my destiny

i just need a heart i know

let me be alone with me

 

 

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

"pushed in back
of musty drawers
with musty dreams
of moon lit shores"

"a world that's lost
it's dignity"

This sums up the necessity for moments of solitude, to let us get above it all, forgetting all our woes and minor worries and look down upon the world as a whole. Excellent.

The comment about a world that's lost it's dignity is so fitting, one of the reasons we need to escape. Nothing is sacred or private any more.

Well done.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

What an exquisite way to describe the beauty of solitude. Such expression is truly compelling. Nicely penned. Wonderful imagery and cadence. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[Bubo]

i just need a heart i know
let me be alone with me

I think many of us writers have these thoughts, to escape the madness of life and just " be", i love the flow and beauty behind your words, the feeling of just wanting peace, the knowledge you know your own heart and feel safe with that.
Wonderful use of metaphors my friend and as always you deliver emotion on depth.

[Jennifer]

Thank you! This feels kind of cool, refreshing. I feel this way these days.

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is one of the best pieces I have read on the Cafe. With your words you have taken me on a heartfelt journey that has deep meaning behind it's narration. The metaphors that you have chosen to use bring a certain insight that gives strength to this piece. I agree that the time we spend alone quietly with ourselves in thought and meditation bring clarity to life. This piece flows so well, its almost like a song. Very Nice! ~ Jude :-)

[Forest Green]

Solitude can be very gratifying; and escaping from the turmoil here below is at times as necessary as life itself.

A very nicely done piece...flows with time and the rhyming is significant and pleasant.

Nice work...

Daniel

[Lena M. P.]

Beautiful, powerful and passionate. Bravo! I can almost see this placed to music. Very well written.

[DarkAngelWriter]

Aww... I love it. No good critique... do I ever have good critique?

♥

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

I know that feeling so well. It is hard to watch those who care go through what they do. I heard a wonderful thing about you, so prayers are powerful things and mine being answered this way is a joy to me.
Always Debby

[Fran Marie]

i want to fly
beyond the sight
of everyone
who hurts for spite
above the wars
fought for greed
a world that's lost
it's dignity

Wow Rain you really say it all in this great piece of writing

especially the above lines about greed and the world losing

dignity~ all so frustrating now in these hard times and days

in our society to be sure~Well DonE! ~Fran

[Dani California]

I feel both empathy and frustration here. "A world that's lost its dignity... " Indeed we seem to be creatures of the flesh more than of the spirit. Broken and lost... but not hopeless.

This is wonderful Rain. Very vivid imagery as I felt myself flying -- rising above the clouds -- soaring over it all -- free.

Lovely work!!