Everyone's gonna get caught

Revised

we used to live down by the old shoe factory me ..you..and tommy..popcycle sticks in our spokes playing on the old sewer pipe drains laughin and lying, with your daddy's stolen smokes   candy store dreams that non of us bought afraid of the dark, afraid to get caught be slick...be smart...use all that you got times running out... but in the end everyone's gonna get caught   everyone falls in love some time everyone tryin to stay cool hot summer nights, pegged pants tight, bleedin over some teenage rule that was us way back then...that was our youth, hopin to keep what you got too young to stand up..too weak to man up, but in the end everyone's gonna get caught   everyone changes, and the time rearranges the way you look at your self bicycles in garages, childhood mirages things you place high on a shelf maria she moved on, with a kid on her own.. tommy he still plays the game the memories are all broken cats still stand round token nothin to defend but your shame you got to take it and go...forget what you know the summer streets are hot no time to be who you're not, but in the end everyones gonna get caught   i left it all behind, cept that bicycle of mine burnt out street lights and a twisted stop sign it was just life i was livin...the life i was given i never complained a lot i had my fun...i did what i done.. i earned all that i got maria's somewhere in omaha  tommy's no-where.. waitin on drugs that he bought i'm unloadin trucks...ain't getting paid very much, but in the end everyones gonna get caught.   everyone's gonna get caught, my friend it's just how it is...and has always been you can find you a rainbow, search for its pot hide in the suburbs, make you a lot raise you a family, give it all that you got, but in the end everyones gonna get caught   there's a rhythm to this life it hides between the noise of grownup responsibilities and yesterdays childhood toys there's places to hide bandages for the wounds you fought but in the end everyones gonna get caught

 

Reviews

[Spat Queen]

I had to review this piece. It reminds me that when I was in school I was always the straight and narrow because I was never smart enough to figure out how not to get caught. i think it is a monumental part of of my personality the part that admires people who take the risk. I especially admire the people who have mastered the art of keeping from getting caught.

this piece has a superb charming rhythm that speaks to every reader.
/everyone falls in love sometime
everyone tryin to stay cool.../

This was always my weakness, it is not a secret I keep well, unfortunately for me.

I love this piece.

[Samuel Dickens]

A favorite subject of my mine--memories of youth. It's very clever and skillful, the way you've written this, Rain. I like it, bit I might be biased since it's reminiscient of some of my writing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a creative look into childhood memories... it flows great as you captures those fun times of the past when we felt as if we'd live forever till time catches up with us... very cool piece.