the color you call blue..

Sometimes I complain about stuff that other people dream of.

you can write about your wars

the battles you've won or lost

you can sing about your highways

all the souvenirs you tossed

tell me all about sweet marie

how she left you all alone

how you wanted to end it all 

how the pain went to the bone

you can drop down to your knees

cry the whole night through

somewhere someone lays alone

from a wound cut clean an true

somewhere someone is bleedin

for the color you call blue

 

sing me about your bad times

sing me and make me cry

tell me about your lost plans

and every dream you watched die

sing me loud your misery

let the world know your pain

tell it how confused you are

how it feels alone in the rain

tell me how it feels my friend

sing me about the life that's you

somewhere someone is bleedin

for the color you call blue

 

tell me about every alley way

every wrong turn you've ever made

let people know how unfair life is

represent all the bruises laid

write a song of a river deep

about the mountains you have faced

tell me how helpless feels

when everything you love's erased

tell me about how hard you tried

but everything you tried went wrong

sing me all about your path

put every failure in your song

when you have screamed out every hurt

you have thrown out all that's true

somewhere someone's bleedin

for the color you call blue..

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Sarah]

This is an amazing poem, and a wonderful read. (: It's interesting to think that the stuff we complain about or take for granted are the things that other people would die for. o= Definitely puts into perspective those people that complain /all/ the time (and I admitt, I'm guilty of this occasionally! XD) This was a rewarding read! ^___^

[D Poet K]

this was very well written and the imagery was wonderful. i think if you put a hook with it, it would be a great song.

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Hi Ray xx I like the catch cry in this, it is a little cynical and gritty, it brings home each stanza perfectly!
I am always impressed with your honest writing and this was no different in blatant truth.
Cheers,
Helen xx

[Pointblank]

This will go into my fave's. It says so much to me I can not express. You have apparently lived what I am now living. I need to hear these things from parents I do not have. Its nice someone writes them down. profoundly touched.

[Dani California]

This is an incredible piece! There will always be someone worse off. And the tragedy is... we so often complain about things that just don't matter, while there is real suffering going on.... to an extent that we can't even imagine.

Looking at what is right and not at what is wrong is the answer. Giving of self. Love, forgiveness, gratitude.....

Thank you for sharing this amazing poem Rain!! It's message is powerful and priceless... :)

[Brenda Sue]

Very inspiring piece. We have all had our hard times. Makes me think of the song "When you're going through Hell" don't know why exactly. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Lauren Xena Campbell]

Beautifully crafted and defiantly one to make you think! Makes me wonder in all this world who has the right to feel blue. Those caught in war of countries greed? Dieing for reasons hidden from them? Parents watching their children die from hunger as they have not the food to feed them? The young boy denied an ice cream after school? The drunk who has to pay out on insurant after running his car into a tree? Beautiful poem!

[jennjenn]

this was great in a wat though it sounds like it could be a song. Try a beat to it had someone sound and some voice and see where it takes you.

[TL Boehm]

Well written, and I agree with the others, this one is highly lyrical - would lend itself well to music although it does not NEED music. It is complete by itself.

[Jenny Davis]

This is very lyrical, Rain. I liked your message too...very true, very strong :)

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I agree with Sarah, we take a lot of things for granted. I admit even though I shouldnt complain, people in worse situations would dream of having a roof under their head, or to have a family or someone that cares about them, like a mother or a father. Very inspiring piece, Rain. I enjoyed this.