this kinda blue

Just words with no place to go..

i've been feeling empty lately

kinda out there all by myself

probably need to get me a thicker coat

put this old one here back up on the shelf

i really need to go somewhere

maybe to the library, maybe read a book

find me a new friend...someplace with a different look

getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do

sometimes think about her...when it's

this kinda blue

 

just don't see nothing headed my way

everyday pretty much the same

people start lookin all alike

everyone seems to have a game

all i got is a necklace from you

sometimes i think the whole city

feels this kinda blue

 

it's just an empty feelin

like this might be all i'll be

some nameless,faceless,no-body

living life aimlessly

i don't see the wind changin

not a whole lot left to do

just sometimes wonder

do you remember me, when it's  

this kinda blue

 

sat in the corner booth

of an old family diner

the waitress that took my order

reminded me a bit of you

coffee and toast

a false smile from the host

a drop of rain

does its lonely dance 

down a window pane

i sit alone in a booth for two

there's a sound to this kind of down

a lonely melody

to this kinda blue

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[April Child]

I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

[John Stussy]

Rain, you are a lyricist! Seriously, heard a really good song while I read this, and read it twice more to listen again.
Such loneliness in this piece, a lot of people feel it but few can express it the way you do.

everyday pretty much the same
people start lookin all alike

that kind of setting would unsettle me so much, i can't stand normality blending into complete regularity. Not for me heh. Great write Rain.

[Dezaraye]

I agree with others, this could definitely be a song. It's melancholy and a bit sad, but I like it. The repetition in each stanza makes it a really strong piece, and it definitely made me think ... lovely.

[The Outlaws' Song]

Yes, this really does sound like a song.I love it.I appreciate the sincerity of your words..their simplicity..and the honesty of your message,the strength of the feelings you capture within the poem and the strength of the vibe it carries to the reader. Well done Rain!!! Thanks for sharing

Tuny

[All faded blue]

I'm thinking you should find a good singer for this, Michael Buble, Tim McGraw, someone with calibre of voice and style to do justice to the words!!

[Fran Marie]

This has such a blusey feel to it and reads like a country/western song ,I like how you did this one
and the rhyme and cadence is spot on~ Extreamy well DonE!!~Fran~

[Candle in the wind]

"i sit alone in a booth for two
there's a sound to this kind of down
a lonely melody
to this kinda blue"
What beautiful lines! how you have captured this mood.It feels like a constriction in my throat.

[Lauren Xena Campbell]

Makes me feel a little blue to read this. I have to agree with the others here, I think it sounds somewhat like a song. I found this very descriptive and an interesting read. As for words with no place to go, they don't seem stationary to me, they go all sorts of place and take the mind with them. Great write.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Very lyrical and song like. A reflective piece, full of thought and lonliness. A really good piece!!!

[George Love]

Very melodic, a little different feel and flow to this work.

[J. Hampton]

This is crying out for music to be composed for it...
The mourning of past heartbreak....can be even more powerful than our fear of new heartbreak.

Again....of course...water ? a metaphor perfect in so many ways...

BEEN BLUE-LIKE-THAT

Blessssssssssssss