this kinda blue

Just words with no place to go..

i've been feeling empty lately

kinda out there all by myself

probably need to get me a thicker coat

put this old one here back up on the shelf

i really need to go somewhere

maybe to the library, maybe read a book

find me a new friend...someplace with a different look

getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do

sometimes think about her...when it's

this kinda blue

 

just don't see nothing headed my way

everyday pretty much the same

people start lookin all alike

everyone seems to have a game

all i got is a necklace from you

sometimes i think the whole city

feels this kinda blue

 

it's just an empty feelin

like this might be all i'll be

some nameless,faceless,no-body

living life aimlessly

i don't see the wind changin

not a whole lot left to do

just sometimes wonder

do you remember me, when it's  

this kinda blue

 

sat in the corner booth

of an old family diner

the waitress that took my order

reminded me a bit of you

coffee and toast

a false smile from the host

a drop of rain

does its lonely dance 

down a window pane

i sit alone in a booth for two

there's a sound to this kind of down

a lonely melody

to this kinda blue

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[April Child]

I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

[dc]

" Sat in the corner booth
Of an old family diner...."

That last stanza is especially strong. The words fit together perfectly.
Coffee and Toast is a good lonely meal to eat.
I like that the last stanza included other people, it somehow made the longing that much stronger,
the empty feeling seem just a little more empty.

Well written.

[Caitbabie008]

Good write! :)

[AngelEyes]

I think from time to time we've all been there. I know I have. An emotional piece that have brought back certain painful memories for me...some things time do heal, but others time cannot touch.

[Carrie Montgomery]

darn it! I tried to give you a '100' on rating says '96' ...what the HECK?!

[Carrie Montgomery]

Oh...wow, I certainly do know "this kinda blue". This is so easy to relate to, very true-to-life...I guess more for some than others. I liked the rhythm and style of this very much.
"probably need to get me a thicker coatput this old one here back up on the shelf" - perhaps a thicker skin...as defense against this heaviness? "getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do" yes, me too...restlessness is in my blood the people in my family are wild and free all "raised on the river" (as we say down here then people get a knowing look in the eyes explains a lot!) the restlestness tries to take over sometimes but I am a wife and mother now, my days of chasing the wind are over I suppose.
"the waitress that took my orderreminded me a bit of you...a false smile" people are so misleading, aren't they?
"there's a sound to this kind of downa lonely melodyto this kinda blue" what an absolutely perfect ending.

[T]

OH I loved this Rain. I can hear the song in the lyrics...great blues song...needs a twangy guitar with it!!!
I hear Bonnie Rait in my head singing this with lots of guitar...wow...very cool!!!!!!!!!!! You should make this a song!!! Play guitar by any chance????? ok still playing in my head.....t

[SM Davis]

yes this kind of blue is lonely and painful. Excellent!

[Blackbirdsong]

I agree with everyone else...this definitely does sound like a song and it definitely captures how those kind of blues feel too.

[Anne Martin]

The title reminded me immediately of Miles Davis, and I know your man Coltrane is on that album.

"the waitress that took my order
reminded me a bit of you
coffee and toast
a false smile from the host
drops of rain
race down a window pane
i sit alone in a booth for two"

This is some of your best writing and has the honesty that I associate with your work. Great job!

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This is really good. It captures how I feel right now. A real good write. The emotions captured are so true of how a lot of people feel sometimes.