this kinda blue

Just words with no place to go..

i've been feeling empty lately

kinda out there all by myself

probably need to get me a thicker coat

put this old one here back up on the shelf

i really need to go somewhere

maybe to the library, maybe read a book

find me a new friend...someplace with a different look

getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do

sometimes think about her...when it's

this kinda blue

 

just don't see nothing headed my way

everyday pretty much the same

people start lookin all alike

everyone seems to have a game

all i got is a necklace from you

sometimes i think the whole city

feels this kinda blue

 

it's just an empty feelin

like this might be all i'll be

some nameless,faceless,no-body

living life aimlessly

i don't see the wind changin

not a whole lot left to do

just sometimes wonder

do you remember me, when it's  

this kinda blue

 

sat in the corner booth

of an old family diner

the waitress that took my order

reminded me a bit of you

coffee and toast

a false smile from the host

a drop of rain

does its lonely dance 

down a window pane

i sit alone in a booth for two

there's a sound to this kind of down

a lonely melody

to this kinda blue

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[April Child]

I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

[Steph]

"it's just an empty feelin
like this might be all i'll be
some nameless, faceless, no-body
living life aimlessly"

i love that. it's how i've been feeling recently, so i really felt your words. thank you.

[PoemRodent]

Oh how well this feeling sits. The imagery you painted so well penned my friend...

[shandi]

Wow. At first it just kinda seemed thrown together, but the more i read, the more i felt every word written. The way everyone begins to look the same, that someone lingering in the back of your mind, needing to go somewhere but having no idea where, needing a new soul get your mind off of the bleakness that seems to be all you can see. Thank you for this one!

[Yvonne Heidt]

Kinda blue...

Loved it. It's the way I've been feeling lately. "Is this IT?" Alone in a crowded room...

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

I think we all have had a day like this and yes when I pray for others it takes me away from that place in my head. So touching and real. Excellent read.
Hugs Debby

[Sally Edwards]

This is great, I have to agree it would be a great song, very good read, flowed and rhymed beautifully

[Emily B]

Anna found a Bessie Smith cd last night. Her first taste of blues. We all have to sing it sometimes.

[Brette Medb]

I could definitely hear music to this. The rhythm and flow were perfect and I loved every line. Great write Rain,


Brette

[Kenji Light]

Everyone's been thinking of this as a song. I think it would be a good night club jazz singer song. I think that with the way that things were presented in this poem it was almost like you had some lyrical aspiration in mind. I think of this as lyrics to a slow jazz piece played on a piano with someone older, someone...distinguished and with a voice that ripples with honesty and regret singing the words and filling eyes with tears and pangs of nostalgia. You have a really good piece here. I enjoyed the loose rhyme scheme that didnt seem too forced. You did a great job presenting the poem itself. -Kenji

[Amanda]

a very good description of the emotions i feel from time to time, as i suppose most of us feel. a really good write. you captured it well. good job.

Always,

Amanda