this kinda blue

Just words with no place to go..

i've been feeling empty lately

kinda out there all by myself

probably need to get me a thicker coat

put this old one here back up on the shelf

i really need to go somewhere

maybe to the library, maybe read a book

find me a new friend...someplace with a different look

getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do

sometimes think about her...when it's

this kinda blue

 

just don't see nothing headed my way

everyday pretty much the same

people start lookin all alike

everyone seems to have a game

all i got is a necklace from you

sometimes i think the whole city

feels this kinda blue

 

it's just an empty feelin

like this might be all i'll be

some nameless,faceless,no-body

living life aimlessly

i don't see the wind changin

not a whole lot left to do

just sometimes wonder

do you remember me, when it's  

this kinda blue

 

sat in the corner booth

of an old family diner

the waitress that took my order

reminded me a bit of you

coffee and toast

a false smile from the host

a drop of rain

does its lonely dance 

down a window pane

i sit alone in a booth for two

there's a sound to this kind of down

a lonely melody

to this kinda blue

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[April Child]

I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This has such a candid voice that it is heart wrenching at places..you have written this with such sweet sincerity and no pretense at all..i love the line..'do you remember me when it is this blue'..i have wondered this so many times that when am spending minutes on minutes wondering about a certain person,if he is spending even a minute of his on me...
Beautifully expressed..couldn't have been better.

[Michael W. Farrelly]

Been there, and you evoke it well, brother. Hope the blue has passed

[Ice QueenJen]

This was absolutely wonderful Rain, and kinda how I feel right now. And as I was reading this it is raining finally, hopefully washing away the blues with it.

:)

[PianoandPage]

very nice emotive and atmospheric piece. the sort of... limbo state that we merge into when we are cut from a recent anchor in our lives. everything just sort of fades.

the repeated line really kept this piece nice and connected as you explored the world through a numb sort of wandering heart.

i also really liked how you played with ryhme. my favorite...

"there's a sound to this kind of down" - that's great stuff.

[Aspiring Angel]

I can't believe that I somehow missed this one! It most certainly deserves your new badge. Congratulations my friend. This is write that we can all relate to in one way or another. There always seems to be times of lonliness that comes along. It is so nice to have dear friends to help us along our way to sunshine.

As always I leave amazed at your talent to relay your feelings be they truth of the moment or a write that we all can associate to be our own feelings.

Hugs,
Lesa

[~angelalala~]

"a drop of rain
does its lonely dance
down a window pane
i sit alone in a booth for two" & how well you've captured this emotion in this poem, the 'blue kinda' feeling. this is wonderful. i love the imagery here. the way you describe the city, the rain, the waitress, the diner, all these ordinary things with the subtle melancholy, empty undertones. a wonderful expression of emotion, of those blues we all find ourselves in at times. great write.

[darkgurl]

I love this, It does sound like a song. This is quite a write I can feel the emotion in this, very well written...Kim

[James Watts]

I know about that empty feeling. Trust me. Nice work, my friend. Great write.

[MandarinOranges]

Wow! I luv it. I feel the loneliness in your words! I've been there!
There is nothing else that I can say about this that hasn't been said already. In my opinion, there is no room for improvment; it's prefect the way it is.

Good luck in the contest and if I haven't said so before...thanks for joining the group!

[The Random Writings Of ..]

The lyrics of the heart, what a sad but fulfilling piece of work you have created here. Nothing short of the truth. We all feel this kinds blue, thank you for expressing it so well through your words.
Much love,
xoxo