Last Dance With A Memory

I can longer close my eyes and see her face. Let me dance once more with her memory.

 

Last Dance with a Memory

 

i will dance with you, one last time

where the sand meets the sea

before all of every yesterday

is no more even memory

 

i cannot explain where it went

we were so sure love would last

and now i owe you one last dance

to say farewell to visions past

 

for many years i held you

in your own sacred place

and even when i fell in love

i gave her her's, but not your space

 

yet time has all but stole you away

something i never dreamed could be

your memory is almost totally gone

the shadows of us, i but barely see

 

we were to be wed

without promise or vow

an understanding of hearts

a destined fate somehow

 

for so many years

we drifted apart

i wed who i loved

you loved another's heart

 

and now, it's come to the end

the corner which belonged always to you

empty and void like an abandoned room

with echos and cobwebs of what time will do

 

listen as we dance

watch the sea pull a way

prints meant for forever

sacred corners, that didn't stay

 

But we owe it to each other

to dance one last song

for the years long faded

and the memory at last gone

Reviews

[~crazy Beautiful~]

this was beautful and so sad, it gave me a lump in my throat.
These lines
"for so many years
we drifted apart
i wed who i loved
you loved another's heart"
mezmerizing
I have been there too
I can feel your pain, it's like love can be so intense on day, and slowly it dies.
Years go by and it dies more, until it is only a memory.
I was with my exfiance for 8 years, i always will love him, and i always have, but somewhere along the way we fell out of love with eachother. One can love but are they in love, the key question to any sucsessful marriage.
keeping love alive
and dancing the memory of love one last time is absolutely beautiful
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[THE BLACK SEAL]

beautifully constructed and carried out

[Amanda]

a nice sentiment for a path that wasn't chosen in years past....i love the comparisons and the imagery. this is a really good depiction of a love lost that could have been.

good job.

Always,
Amanda

[Candle in the wind]

What tenderness and nostalgia.I really appreciated this.No trace of bitterness though there are pangs of regret.

[E. M. Murren]

This work made me sigh. There is always a path not taken... We may hold a hint of regret throughout our lives, but we know where our priorities lie. This is fine work. You are subtle yet clear offering us a beautiful form of goodbye. Really well done.

[None]

I got goosebumps from the emotion that wells up in this. Your poem is very tenderly written and a perfect way to face things and say goodbye. Each stanza contains jewels and they build on one another quite beautifully. I'm saving this to my favorites! Excellent and wonderful!

[Brenda Sue]

So emotional. My heart beat fasten with each line as I read. Wonderfully written.

[THERISA]

A sad but poignant poem about love lost. Hoping to share one last time together. The pain and emotions are bleed forth with each stanza until the end. Thank you for sharing this very emotional poem with us.

Therisa

[Ladysue]

Rain, I love it. It is beautiful and so sad. I can identify with this one. It is a extremely touching piece that has such beautiful memories that drift off and that is how life is and it is sad, but it has to be for us to move on. I loved every line in here, but my ultimate stanza is this one. It just says it all so poignantly with great imagery!!
listen as we dance
watch the sea pull a way
prints meant for forever
sacred corners, that didn't stay

Excellently expressed piece!

[Kelly D. Burris]

Beautiful, bittersweet powerful write. Very impacting.
Wonderful piece for the library.
Kelly

[Danielle Asher]

this is lovely. the image of dancing is always so powerful to me.