Upon the Slumber of thy Love

 

I can still hear the waves crashing,

fighting its way across the shore,

bowing at my feet; my heart rushing

towards the unknown roar.

 

Upon the slumber of thy love,

I can still feel him there,

Oh despair! despair!

sitting beside me; feet bare.

 

Unsaid words playing hide-and-seek,

the breeze whispering unkept secrets,

we were so close, yet so far; bleak,

silence feeding upon treasured regrets.

 

Sunrays glowed on our cheeks,

as day unfolds again down the slope,

memories turning sour and sweet,

building our faith upon hopeless hope.

 

We would watch the everlasting horizon,

occasionally, our toes would touch,

his irises would lock mine in a prison

of  broken love encaged within a stitched heart.

 

Author's Note

the eyes are the mirror of the soul...

Reviews

[Nath]

I really enjoyed all the opposites - sometimes life is contradicting. "building our faith upon hopeless hope." is my favorite line and I absolutely love it - to me it shows the fragility of the "construction" and that it is bound to break - but built nonetheless. Bold and brave and, in my eyes, the right thing to do: Daring and taking risks is essential.
A strong poem, I really liked it!

[Hotwater]

This is compelling... so easy to read, the vision is sad and happy all at the same time. Well done to you.
*bird*

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Beautifully penned and emotional piece. Nicely done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. The ocean and two people can create memories to last a lifetime. I like the description and the photo. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Despair sitting beside me feet bare............what a wonderful bittersweet piece!

[Enigma]

So poignant and insightful. The imagery was beautiful and the word-play was impressive and smooth. Loved it. Keep it up!

[paparapapa]

I loved how you described the scene. It's so clear and so vivid. Also, you chose really beautiful words and it has a smooth flow to it making this poem very fun to read. Great job. :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow...such amazing use of poetic words...the scene playing in mind as I read is so vivid and beautiful...has such magnetism....read it few times now and will never tire of it...

Brilliant 1000/1000!!!!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Gosh, this is stunning!! SO beautifully written. I love the imagery! It's just great! I can picture it in my mind. =) And yes, i do agree on the eyes being the mirror of the soul. That is true. =D

[joshua deathdealer]

This is beautiful and heartfelt..xx