Meteor Shower

 

 

" Waves crashing at my feet,

  my sorrows sinking in deep,

  life revolving around a grain of sand,

  secret murmurs i couldn't understand,

  the sea veils my eyes,

  blinking stars across the skies,

  and

  as a meteor shower crushes my hopes,

  i lose my soul and become a host."

Author's Note

some stray thoughts...
honest comments please...
[pic is from fotoblur]

note: as to the question of: to what am I hosting? "its just an inspiration i got when i wrote the poem...the thing is that...'in the poem', the moment i lose my soul...which then becomes a wandering soul...the soul become a host and searched fro another body to accomodate it! [its not far-fetched---read The Host by Stephenie Meyer...{and no...im not a vampire-addict when i read Meyer's books :P}]

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Beautiful. Art. Wonderful writing.

[paparapapa]

I.LOVE.THE.PICTURE. and of course, no doubt, your poem. I've read the book so I get the message of the poem. Lovely write, good job.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

wow this is awesome! i love this. Good job!! :))) mind checking out some of my work? thanks :)))

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I think without the author's note I can understand this. After one loses a soul, the theory that comes to mind is if you lose your soul you are vulnerable to become like a puppet with another....i think im thinking too much....but anyways, I still enjoyed the write! Beautifully written.

~Anna Rose

[Mike Winegar]

I got a sense of the of the sea's mystery and the universe's power. I am a bit curious as to what you are hosting.

[Coyote Poetry]

The sky is a great mystery. The science people try to control all things. Never will control the beauty of a night. I like the beautiful photo and strong words. The ending did confuse me. I like to see the raining of meteor in the night. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sleeping Maiden]

Lovely! It's tragic yet it has that mystery feel to it as well. I love it!
Well-written. Great job!

[Adam Lain]

I'm curious to know what you are becoming "host" to?

[Nath]

It's beautiful - it portrays the sea as the mysterious thing it is.
Although visually a bit seperated from the rest of the poem, the last two lines complete the poem perfectly.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

So nice and perfect this poem...so poetic that it's such a pleasure to read :)