Release

release of a suffocating soul...

 

She would always stand there,

Alone, on those weeping rocks; feet bare,

Waves would crash in furiously,

Her eyes holding tear pockets,

Yet, she wouldn't shed them; she wouldn't dare!

For the rocks wept for her silently...

 

The gust catches in the folds of her dress,

Her hair press on her cheeks; soothing her...

Her skin feels tight, her hand shivers,

Despair looms around her; ambush!

 

Suddenly, she straighten up; erect!

Her eyes widen; her irises constrict to slits,

Her mouth stretches to a smile; her thin lips, splits!

Finally...peace...

 

She close those lost eyes; once almond-shaped,

Breathed in deeply; for once, relaxed,

and she felt it slowly-

Her heart cracking passionately!

One last time, her lips opened delicately

and her soul sailed out happily...

 

Release

Author's Note

just a dream--or rather a nightmare which i had and twisted it a bit...
comments please
[pic is from fotoblur]

Reviews

[Nath]

Delightfully descriptive despite of the sense of surreality, it gives life to the scenery.
Unlike others I don't find the ending sad since the soul of the girl is happy in its release.
Peace can come in different forms and is mostly felt. When it is felt, it is present.
I find the second and third stanza interesting in their contrast. Despair's presence brings most down, but is stood through here.
Overall a beautiful write.

[Akshat♥]

These feeling are very easy..
Life has so much in it..sadness is always a part of it..
Finally you get a release from it at the end that's great:)
Different and nice poem!!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I loved this poem. It was very nicely written. I think the picture went with it nicely as well. It was a powerful piece. Thanks for sharing.

[Black]

wonderfull..
you can write better poetry then me
and im jealous :O

keep it up..
it has such a great flow.. and such powerfull emotions..

[Enigma]

Wonderful. The picture fits so perfectly with the poem which itself flows so smoothly. You have used imagery in a very impressive way so that the poem strikes at the heart of the reader. Well done.

[White Ink]

First stanza is amazing!
nicely twisted and it has a dream feeling in it..
well done!

[Niki Wilson]

Even the picture sstartled me.. Well done!

[Phoenix]

It defintely twists, I can feel the waves crashing upon me as I read.

[Short.Nerd]

Wow... this was great :)

[kasanova]

That's gotta be one crazy dream