Heaven

when death taste sweeter than honey...

They shouted,laughed,screamed; noisy,

I watched, silently through the keyhole,

they were happy - elated and smiling,

I watched, alone, in the hall...

 

Nobody knew

Nobody suspected

Nobody cared

Nobody asked

 

why?

 

As if I cared,

Never!

They would never know that he is in here!

He cares!

 

Nobody knew

Nobody suspected

Nobodu cared

Nobody asked

 

They would never understand.

They thought i was mad.

They judged and I withstand!

They said he was dead and i went mad!

 

Nobody knew

Nobody suspected

Nobody cared

Nobody asked

 

He holds me tighter,

I nestled in his arms further,

They knew; they were coming faster!

i close my eyes tighter; and then,

 

Heaven

Author's Note

just a thought which transformed into a poem...
comments? reviews?

Reviews

[Nath]

Loved the contrast between the "I" and the "they" and when "they" come, it's haunting. The repetition of

"Nobody knew
Nobody suspected
Nobodu cared
Nobody asked"

adds to that feeling in my eyes.
A wonderful work!

[White Ink]

I wasnt expecting this ending! when i read "Heaven" i was like wait what? lol
then read it all over again..
Very captivating and the format of this piece is interesting.

Nice!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Nice to have a secret place to celebrate life and love. I like how you told the story in the poem.
"Nobody knew
Nobody suspected
Nobody cared
Nobody asked"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Great poem, expressed so well, and what a nice ending:)

[Adam Lain]

The way it sounded in my head matched the punctuation. It took me there, exclamation and all.

[Sukriti Suki]

Death can also be viewed as the beautiful end to a lovely journey..I like the format and the font colour variation. Nice work.

[Akshat♥]

hmm...this is nice..looks like a good poem..
when death taste sweeter than honey
that's really nice..
this line makes the poem really strong:They judged and I withstand!
so far so good!!

[Haifa]

It is really great poem.. powerful one! it touched me but really sad.. well done! Really well done!

[An owl on the moon]

I was intrigued by the different styles and colors.. you pulled me in with the rhythmic voice... speaking and sighing. This had such a longing feel to it.. for that which will end all pain..