Living Through It All

Living through hell and going insane

              I am seeing the world I have taken in vain

I fight all my battles but find no releif

              I find my oldl ife has become something to greive

My world has begun to spin off its hinge

             I see all the fighting as I stand by and cringe

But I'm only 15 and my words won't stop a war

             So my worthless life is something to deplore.....

Reviews

[Jared Hughes]

War. Never a good thing. Good poem.

[Last Lying Look]

Wow. This is really strong.
I too am 15 and I too feel the way you seem to.
Excellent poem! :)

-Elissa

[BeautyFromTheEarth93]

AMAZING! you have so much talent all bottled up in your mind and heart! maybe you should publish these poems! i know that people would read them! i feel the same way too......:((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((

[Barbara Walker]

This poem expresses much feeling, the time when youth suddenly REALLY opens their eyes to see what is going on in the world, how war makes you feel, the feelings of helplessness(though that is a feeling that belongs to all humans, not just the young). Maybe the war won't be stopped by one voice, but it could be stopped by the voices of many and though you are just 15, your life is anything, but worthless! This is a great write! Barbara

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is great; I loved the opening lines a lot. You know when I was 15 I also kind of have the same thinking (But I was not so talented like you)...I'm 18 right now but these couple of years means a lot!
I found your poem very dark with a great feel of sadness in it..
"I fight all my battles but find no releif
I find my oldl ife has become something to greive"

It should be "relief" , "old life" and "grieve" in these lines I guess :)
The formatting is also very appealing�So, it is a great write overall!